The following appeared in a memo from the owner of a chain of cheese stores located throughout the United States.
"For many years all the stores in our chain have stocked a wide variety of both domestic and imported cheeses. Last year, however, all of the five best-selling cheeses at our newest store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. Furthermore, a recent survey by Cheeses of the World magazine indicates an increasing preference for domestic cheeses among its subscribers. Since our company can reduce expenses by limiting inventory, the best way to improve profits in all of our stores is to discontinue stocking many of our varieties of imported cheese and concentrate primarily on domestic cheeses."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
Conclusion : Focussing on domestic cheese rather than stocking on imported cheese
Assumption: last yr fuve best selling are domestic
survey preference for domestic
Unstated: is the scenario same from last year?
In the memo from the cheese store owner of USA stated that store should focus primarily on domestic cheeses rather than imported ones so that can reduce the expenses and can increase the profits. This conclusion is made on the assumptions that last year five best selling cheeses at their new store were domestic cheddar cheeses from Wisconsin. However, more light is shed on the issue and more detailed facts are concerned, lack of answers through the argument leads me to question its validity.
First of all, is the scenario same from the last year? In other words, are people now interested to buy domestic cheese than the imported ones? Maybe last year there was no imported cheese so people have no option rather than buying the domestic cheese. It is possible that the price of the imported cheese were higher than the domestic which in turn increased the sales. If the above assumption is merit then the argument is weakened.
Secondly, is the survey reliable? In other words, did the questions asked in the survey were genuine and accurate or were they biased so that people can chose only domestic satellites? It might be possible that questions were asked in a way that people are tend to chose the option which includes domestic cheese. If the above mentioned scenario is true then the argument doesn’t hold water.
Finally, is there any new cheese which is imported in the market? It might be possible that the new imported cheese might be into the market. Perhaps, people are more keen to try new cheese rather than the domestic ones. If the above mentioned assumption is true then argument is not strengthened.
To conclude, the argument, stands as of now is considerably flawed. However, if the owner provides more evidence and offers answers to the above questions then the argument can be considerably flawed.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1657 1500
No. of Different Words: 149 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.817 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.352 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.481 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.334 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.648 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 9 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 51, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...: last yr fuve best selling are domestic survey preference for domestic Unstat...
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Line 5, column 31, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mestic survey preference for domestic Unstated: is the scenario same from last...
^^^^
Line 13, column 375, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...stic which in turn increased the sales. If the above assumption is merit then the ...
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Line 17, column 69, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ask'?
Suggestion: ask
...able? In other words, did the questions asked in the survey were genuine and accurate...
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Line 21, column 222, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...w cheese rather than the domestic ones. If the above mentioned assumption is true ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1732.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 343.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04956268222 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47447761776 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.440233236152 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 534.6 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1757516505 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1578947368 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0526315789 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73684210526 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 5.15768463074 174% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23057556863 0.218282227539 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735763640958 0.0743258471296 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786566837901 0.0701772020484 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112986352494 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696299240566 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.71 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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