The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a company that builds shopping malls around the country.
"The surface of a section of Route 101, paved just two years ago by Good Intentions Roadways, is now badly cracked with a number of dangerous potholes. In another part of the state, a section of Route 40, paved by Appian Roadways more than four years ago, is still in good condition. In a demonstration of their continuing commitment to quality, Appian Roadways recently purchased state-of-the-art paving machinery and hired a new quality-control manager. Therefore, I recommend hiring Appian Roadways to construct the access roads for all our new shopping malls. I predict that our Appian access roads will not have to be repaired for at least four years."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The memo represents comparison between two Roadways companies, one is Good Intentions and other is Appian. The Good Intentions Road paved road on Route 101 two years ago and now the condition is very bad where as in route 40 the Appian Roadways paved road four years ago and still it is in good condition. On the basis of it, the vice president of a shopping mall construction company decided the Appian Roadways is better option for construction of roads all around new shopping malls. Before taking final decision, the vice president should answer the following questions which predict opposite scenario than he is considering currently.
Moreover, the roads are public properties, and everyone use it so, it should be made with high quality material to maintain for long-term. At the same time the construction of roads depends on government or public representative to lead the city and they decide the budget for construction. There is possibility that the Route 101 constructed in low-budget in comparison of Route 40. The Good Intentions Roadways had completed work in low-budget are per that times requirements so, we cannot say they are not good in their work.
Furthermore, the vice president assumes that Appian access road will not have to be repaired for at least four years. Without any evidence one cannot assume the road will not damage. There are different conditions such as damage in pipe line or heavy rainfall, a greater number of vehicles passing from road especially heavy vehicles. The Good Intentions access road may be main connecting road of different colonies and there is traffic and always busy with passers that’s why is becoming cracked or due to heavy rain fall there are number of dangerous potholes. While in Appian access roads the number of vehicles passes by were very few and it is not too much used by people. The strong evidences are required for Appian access road to prove it is best.
Additionally, in the given memo there is no research data or statistical report which prove that the Appain Roadways are better than Good Intentions. Behind every action there are different factors similarly, there are also above discussed factors and data related to accessibility of the road is not mentioned. So, the questions raised on recommendation of vice president that what are concrete facts which prove Appain Roadways are better than other one?
Finally, above points clarifies that the recommendation is based on predictions of vice presidents. Before selection of Roadways company, the Vice president should collect strong evidences to select one and then construct access roads for all new shopping malls.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 436 350
No. of Characters: 2177 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.57 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.993 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.682 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.947 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.294 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...s ago and now the condition is very bad where as in route 40 the Appian Roadways paved r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, similarly, so, still, then, while, at least, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11697247706 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76204217717 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.490825688073 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 691.2 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.4518796923 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.421052632 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.9473684211 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202379476509 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608124795406 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619141143309 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111822176859 0.128457276422 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0958385391093 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 98.500998004 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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