The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our warehouse in Palm City,
but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company,
which we have used for many years in Palm City, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food
stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. This difference in pest damage is best explained by the negligence of Fly-Away."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and
explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 594 350
No. of Characters: 2853 1500
No. of Different Words: 222 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.937 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.803 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.499 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 197 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 162 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.95 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.37 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.569 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.173 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 158, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at Fly-Away pest control company and the vice presidents food company made an agr...
^^^
Line 2, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Palm City but over 0,000 worth food was destroyed due to pests. The author of th...
^^^
Line 5, column 54, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t on duty and are responsible for loss. The argument. in order to be properly evalu...
^^^
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...are responsible for loss. The argument. in order to be properly evaluated, should ...
^^
Line 10, column 173, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...as compared to Wintervale, Fly-Away Pest Control Company was not able to protect ...
^^^
Line 19, column 111, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'tell'
Suggestion: tell
...ood in different warehouses but did not told about the type of food they had to prot...
^^^^
Line 20, column 173, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...the companies are guarding are not same , it begs the questions if any of the foo...
^^
Line 26, column 113, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a systematic manner" with adverb for "systematic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... by providing strong evidence, possibly in a systematic manner, then we can properly judge if the los...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 55.5748502994 140% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2939.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 594.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94781144781 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55821097272 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.387205387205 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 908.1 705.55239521 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 93.3564539815 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.684210526 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2631578947 23.324526521 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.84210526316 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 21.0 5.15768463074 407% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.450169852061 0.218282227539 206% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150867776271 0.0743258471296 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129245905683 0.0701772020484 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179640050447 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130534076373 0.0628817314937 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 12.3882235529 218% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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