The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
Acoording to the published article, A study on 300 mean and women was conducted comparing the average number of hours they slept at night to and the success of their firms. The study showed that that executives of firms that slept no more thna 6 hours per night had higher profit margins and faster growth.Therefore, the arguer suggest that in order to prosper, they shoud hire people who require less than 6 hours of sleep.However, the resoning of the arguer is flawed and the data presented in the article is insufficient enough to make such an assertion.
Firstly, the information is given regarding the work experience of the executives considered under the study.There may be a chance that most of the the executives are new joinees, therefore taking a larger amount of time complete a given assigment under a specific deadline resulting in long working hours and less sleep hours reducing the overall sleep average.Hence, the efficiency of these executives is less and hirng them wouldn't contribute in enhacing business.
Sencondly, other factors such as overtime, extra leaves etc are also not taken into consideration.It may be possible that thefirms in which executives getting no more than 6 hours of sleep work must be offering them 3 or more days of leave instead of just the weekend or paying them generously for the overtime.In such cases,when the reward is high people will tend to work more. So, in this case giving incentives to its employees will motivate them to work harder rather than just hiring people on the assumption that they will work overtime for no reason.
In recapitualtion, with the resonings provided above it will be rather rash on the arguer part to just assume that by hirirng people who require less than 6 hours of sleep will make the business grow fatser. No solid evidence is provided to prove the claim.Rather, for a business to grow, it should provide a friendly office enviorment with great perks rather rather than just expecting its employess to work endlessy without any benefits.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 11 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 350 350
No. of Characters: 1656 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.325 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.731 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.459 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 50 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.501 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.459 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.785 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.234 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...udy showed that that executives of firms that slept no more thna 6 hours per nigh...
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...udy.There may be a chance that most of the the executives are new joinees, therefore t...
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...these executives is less and hirng them wouldnt contribute in enhacing business. Sen...
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...h as overtime, extra leaves etc are also not taken into consideration.It may be p...
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...ndly office enviorment with great perks rather rather than just expecting its employess to wo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1696.0 2260.96107784 75% => OK
No of words: 341.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97360703812 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8011867745 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551319648094 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 22.8473053892 210% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 110.605753255 57.8364921388 191% => OK
Chars per sentence: 242.285714286 119.503703932 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.7142857143 23.324526521 209% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.1428571429 5.70786347227 213% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185034464768 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895568303528 0.0743258471296 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644780372579 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115492920841 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802912861422 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.3 14.3799401198 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.22 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.8 12.197005988 171% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.81 8.32208582834 118% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 21.2 11.1389221557 190% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.9071856287 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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