The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city s flagging economy Dillton s city council voted last year to lower the city s corporate tax rate by 15 percent at the same

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The following appeared as part of an article in a Dillton newspaper.
"In an effort to bring new jobs to Dillton and stimulate the city's flagging economy, Dillton's city council voted last year to lower the city's corporate tax rate by 15 percent; at the same time, the city began offering generous relocation grants to any company that would move to Dillton. Since these changes went into effect, two new factories have opened in Dillton. Although the two factories employ more than 1,000 people, the unemployment rate in Dillton remains unchanged. The only clear explanation for this is that the new factories are staffed with out-of-town workers rather than Dillton residents."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The author of this article from the Dillton newspaper comes to the conclusion that the only explanation for the lack of change in the unemployment rate of the city after the opening of two new factories could be that the residents of the city are not working in them. Even though this claim might represent a plausible explanation, I think that there are some other possible explanations that need to be considered.

In the first place, there is no information about the city of Dillton and its residents. If the number of residents was known, then it would have been possible to have a greater insight on how the 2000 new jobs offered by the new factories did not affect the unemployment rate. For instance, if the city had 500.000 residents and half of them were unemployed, then a change in 2000 new workers would not lead to a noticeable difference in the unemployment rate. On the other hand, if Dillton were to be a small city with 10,000 residents, then the employment due to the opening of the new factories would have been supposed to show a discrepancy in the unemployment rate.

Another possible explanation could come from the fact that the 2000 “new” employees supposed to work in the new factories were already workers for them, but just out of town. In fact, the author of this article reports that in order to revitalize the city’s declining economy the city reduced its corporate tax and offered relocation grants to any company that moved in it. Thus, it might be probable that the two new factories which opened in the city had their previous location just out of town and decided to change it in order to take advantage of the benefits the city council was offering. If this was the case, then it would be reasonable to think that most of the workers of the factories were citizens of Dull city and used to be out-of-town workers, thus explaining the missing change in the unemployment rate.

In conclusion, I would say that the author’s claim is reasonable and could possibly explain the reason why the unemployment rate did not see any difference after the opening of the two new factories. Nevertheless, it is wrong to assume that it is the only clear explanation. There are some other possible reasons why such discrepancy was not seen after the new factories opened, and the explanations I wrote about are an example of them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'could'.
Suggestion: could
...at the author’s claim is reasonable and could possibly explain the reason why the unemployment...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, nevertheless, so, then, thus, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, in the first place, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1957.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 413.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73849878935 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71127198648 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421307506053 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.2462439091 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.538461538 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7692307692 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218695359132 0.218282227539 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0895923454984 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688737873663 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137731668816 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505533465196 0.0628817314937 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.8 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1905 1500
No. of Different Words: 165 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.613 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.634 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.625 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.846 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.419 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.613 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5