The following appeared as part of a letter to the editor of a scientific journal.
"A recent study of eighteen rhesus monkeys provides clues as to the effects of birth order on an individual's levels of stimulation. The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings. Firstborn humans also produce relatively high levels of cortisol in stimulating situations (such as the return of a parent after an absence). The study also found that during pregnancy, first-time mother monkeys had higher levels of cortisol than did those who had had several offspring."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The author of the passages argue that the degree of stimulation correlated to the birth order because the amount of emitted hormone called cortisol significantly shows the difference between the trend of representing the younger or older monkeys and humans. The author also indicate the tendency of the grade of cortisols will proportion to the number of the pregnancy regarding the mothers who pregnant for the first time of not. (Someone had the higher of it when they have not experienced this incident.). Although the evidence such as analyzing the proportionality applied to the relations in the case of pregnancy and birth order, the author should substantiate the following points in order to enhance the convincement for the reader of the document. The rest of the essay will discuss the issue what the author missed to prove or refer to strengthen the quality of the essay.
The most noticeable matter that should be noted what the author failed to substantiate is whether the sources or statistics for this conclusions on the cortisols and the sequence of the coming to the world were not clearly presented. By doing so, the requirements to pursue others with the topic can be hardly possible supports he mentioned give vague explanations on the main subject of argument such as if there exists sufficient number of the samples or participants on the baseline experiments to prove the statement or assumption that he assert to say about the drift of the connection between cortisols and the order of the birth or pregrancy. Even though I back down and believe everything works well, there still some question the author overly assumed.
In conclusion, we had heated controversy on whether the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, regarding, so, still, then, well, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.6327345309 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1427.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 282.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06028368794 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83395460927 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.567375886525 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 440.1 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 106.670601779 57.8364921388 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 158.555555556 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.3333333333 23.324526521 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11111111111 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0768178643387 0.218282227539 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0271243271412 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0452378784553 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0394023675359 0.128457276422 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419909925343 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 14.3799401198 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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