The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The arguments made in this petition are fallacious and possibly dangerous. The entire paragraph is full of end of the world type speech that is meant to scare the general public into signing this petition. We will see how this sale of land and erection of a small hotel could actually help the bird populations more than anything else.
As stated in the argument against the hotel, this is a small percentage of land. This assumes that there is still much more land left for the bird populations. The assumption that the loss of a small portion of land would simply decimate bird populations is not grounded in ornithological sciences at all. Many birds rely on varying landscapes to survive as only one source of food or shelter could result in disaster if that source were depleted. The birds understand that and adapt to rely on a myriad of sources and supplies to stay alive. This will not be interrupted by the hotel and may even provide some of those sources with landscaping and perches for raptor species to hunt over.
The Smith corporation is already doing all that they can to appease and protect this preserve. They have already stated to preserve the sanctuary and the erection of this hotel could even be good for the bird species. The hotel could these rooms after local species and have feeders outside of the windows to assist in the tourism generated by this hotel. The tourists that do come to see these species would, I'm sure, be thrilled to see some of these treasured species from the comfort of their rooms since they are the primary reason for visitation.
The Smith corporation would generate tourism dollars and tax revenue for the entire community but especially for the Yougtown Wildlife Preserve, as that would be the main draw for the tourists. This would give the preserve more money for proper management of this preserve. The preserve could even partner with Smith in the future to provide guided bird watching tours or opportunities for guests to learn about proper avian management from those who truly know what that entails.
That brings us to my final point. The Youngtown Wildlife Preserve has the right to buy and sell land as with many entities. As a wildlife preserve it should take into account the species they manage for as a first priority. If after discussion internally they have found that the sell of this land will not negatively effect these populations, then that should be the choice that is made. These are the professionals in the area and they should have the best idea about what it would take to manage for these species. They could also be other reasons for the sell of land like, layoffs effecting how much land they can properly care for, or budget concerns. These should all be factored into the decision making process and we should respect the decision that is made by the preserve, whichever decision that it.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 501 350
No. of Characters: 2342 1500
No. of Different Words: 233 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.731 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.675 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.351 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.783 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.132 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.348 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.493 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Medicine has long been a profession that...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a record for their doctors history. As stated previously, medicine is a comp...
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Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...edge is specific to this profession and isnt readily known by the layman. Although t...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ition to even be weighted the same. Another issue rising from this kind of a...
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Line 5, column 37, Rule ID: KIND_OF_A[1]
Message: Don't include 'a' after a classification term. Use simply 'kind of'.
Suggestion: kind of
... Another issue rising from this kind of a system would be demographic based. If a...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...nts were the same across the board. Although access to information and the a...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ople are going to a doctor because they dont understand what is wrong with them. The...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, may, second, so, well, as to, i feel, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2369.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88453608247 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65543477218 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 215.323595506 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503092783505 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5866457627 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.611111111 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9444444444 23.4991977007 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168555720205 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0527580254844 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600326468964 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108799022095 0.150359130593 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0309442319429 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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