The following appeared as part of a petition sent to residents of Youngtown by an environmental protection group:
“The Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is now part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. This sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 bird species that live in our area. Although only a small percentage of the land will be sold to Smith, the proposed development will have disastrous consequences for our area. The company plans to build a small hotel on the land. Although they have promised to ensure the preservation of the sanctuary, there is no way that their plans will do anything but harm the sanctuary. There are no circumstances under which this sale will benefit our community, which relies on tourists who visit primarily to see our magnificent bird population.”
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The petition sent by an environmental protection group to residents of Youngtown concludes that the Smith Corporation should not be permitted to develop the land that is a part of the Youngtown Wildlife Preserve. It mentions that the sale of the land will have various disastrous effects on the bird species in the area. However, this petition rests on few assumptions which might be flawed, unless the protection group answers the following the three questions.
First, how can the small percentage of the land sold to the Smith Corporation have egregious consequences to the whole area. The group assumes that the Corporation's development in the small land will cause disastrous effects on the bird species of the area. Perhaps, this might not be the case at all. The small land might be far away from the bird sanctuary. There is also possiblilty that the Smith Corporation take a proper care of the environment around the land or maybe have a healthy environment for the birds after all.
Second, the group assumes that there are no alternative ways in which the deal will benefit the community. The community of Yountown may however, make a deal which benefits both, the corporation and the sanctuary. They may ask the company to avoid usage of any materials that harm the environment or birds in any way. Moreover, they can ask the company to grow more trees or perform no activities that cause pollution in the area. They can also maintain few ground rules or strict environment policies which benefit everyone.
Third, how does it guarantee that the small hotel will not bring tourists to the sanctuary in any manner? The protection group presumes that the small hotel by the company may bring anything but harm to the sanctuary. There may a slight chance that the small hotel might attract more tourists than the community does at this moment. Tourism may in fact, get better if such small hotels are allowed in the area. This not only benfits the community but is also a potential way in which the protection group or sanctuary can spread bird survival awareness with the mass.
To conclude, the petition from the protection group can answer the above mentioned questions and even provide evidence and proof to support their assumptions.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 380 350
No. of Characters: 1835 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.415 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.829 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.576 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.74 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.562 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 91, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...will not bring tourists to the sanctuary in any manner? The protection group pres...
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Line 13, column 535, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ction group or sanctuary can spread bird survival awareness with the mass. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, third, after all, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1888.0 2260.96107784 84% => OK
No of words: 380.0 441.139720559 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96842105263 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62206701994 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447368421053 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.1059174122 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.3684210526 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.36842105263 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267466120193 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0853956403351 0.0743258471296 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.156567644604 0.0701772020484 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164997784382 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.182904644582 0.0628817314937 291% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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