The following appeared in a recommendation from the planning department of the city of Transopolis."Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard ho

The cynosure of statement is to use declining residential area for industrial use to reduce crime rates and increased property tax revenues. The planning department is concerned about the betterment of the city of Tansopolis and, at first glance, the concern shared seems appropriate. But on in-depth analysis of the statement we find that there are various assumptions taken. We need certain facts and figures to validate the validity of the assumptions taken.
Firstly, the figures on unoccupied houses is not clear. For example, there can be a hundred houses and out of them twenty are unoccupied. This will lead to numerous settled houses to get displaced and create alternate housing for them. Also, there is a probability that the alternate housing would not consist of same environment thus it would not be desirable for them. Assuming that majority of the houses are empty and only some houses (say 10/100) will be displaced, another assumption taken in statement of establishing industrial use area in this region puts us in a dubious situation. It does not state that the land is appropriate for the industry use and will not impact the city environment or nearby colonies. Maybe the land does not contain essential requirements( like water, human resource access, etc.) to establish industry or in case a factory is established, colonies nearby will have certain calculated health issues. Infact, the reason for citizens leaving the residential area could be due to its pllutions or any other factor that are impacting their health. Thus, it is important to gather information on the number of occupied houses and its area.
Another assumption taken is that there are more industries that are waiting to collaborate with city and establish their bases. We need to accumulate the accurate data on the number of industries and their establishment requirements. Even if the area is converted for industrial use and all requirements are built, the need of investors to construct factories is important otherwise the land will be of no use. Moreover, the availability of human resource to work in these industries needs to be determined as if citizens are not available there will be need to create accomodations for migrated resources( people who will come to city to work from nearby villages/cities). Hence, to determine appropriate resources becomes vital in this case.
Lastly, moving ahead to plan implemented 10 yrs ago, there is a certainty that the decision was taken due to lack of jobs which resulted in increased crime rates and the increase in property tax revenue was a by product. If such conditions like crime still exists in city, it might be due to some other factors and developing land for industry usage might not be required. Also, constructing of another area for similar usage might lead to drop in property value of the first place due to increased option.
Gathering information on all the above points like knowledge on declining residential area: reason of decline, area nearby, suitable for establishments; Resources: Industry and human resources; Purpose of establishment 10 yrs ago and its compatibility with today's' scenario are vital for the analysis of recommendation from the planning department and ensure its validity.

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Average: 6.9 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...clining residential area for industrial use to reduce crime rates and increased pro...
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Line 2, column 157, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...wenty are unoccupied. This will lead to a large number of settled houses to get displaced and cre...
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Line 2, column 311, Rule ID: DONT_NEEDS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'consist'?
Suggestion: consist
...ity that the alternate housing will not consists of same environment thus it will be not...
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Line 2, column 311, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'consist'
Suggestion: consist
...ity that the alternate housing will not consists of same environment thus it will be not...
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Line 2, column 1095, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat are impacting their health. Thus, it is important to gather information on th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, still, thus, for example, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2737.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 532.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14473684211 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80261649409 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94563866209 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 204.123752495 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471804511278 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 886.5 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.4385259398 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1304347826 23.324526521 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26086956522 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179705830357 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0516839916077 0.0743258471296 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0449018653577 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109031653582 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305522866788 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 98.500998004 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 531 350
No. of Characters: 2675 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.8 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.038 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.851 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 149 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 83 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.136 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.976 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.274 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.274 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5