The following appeared on the Website Science News Today."In a recent survey of more than 5,000 adolescents, the teens who reported eating the most meals with their families were the least likely to use illegal drugs, tobacco, or alcohol. Family meal

Essay topics:

The following appeared on the Website Science News Today.
"In a recent survey of more than 5,000 adolescents, the teens who reported eating the most meals with their families were the least likely to use illegal drugs, tobacco, or alcohol. Family meals were also associated with higher grades, better self-esteem, and lower rates of depression. Almost 30 percent of the teens said they ate at least seven meals per week with their families. Clearly, having a high number of family meals keeps teens from engaging in bad behaviors."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The focus of introduction of the passage is appeared on Website Science News Today suggesting that more number of meals by adolescents has less number of illegal drugs such as alcohol, tobacco etc. In this arguement, there are many flaws which are not focused properly in this passage. Appropriate examples will be provided to improve the flaw in the arguement. As per point of view, I am against the context of passage mentioned by author.

Let's take the first example of survey which comprises of more than 5000 adolscents. The author has given a result on basis of survey that use of illegal drugs and alcohol is less in those who meals with their family. The flaw in the assumption is that author has not mentioned complete data-set on the family-meals which does not reveal any further information. To improve this flaw, proper data should be described by author that provide valid reasons to prove the assumptions made by author.

Additionally, he has given raw data that 30 percent of teens ate atleast seven meals per week with their families. But, author has not mentioned any relation between the survey which meals per week and usage of drugs, alcohol etc. The question which arise here is that how we extract results from the above entioned data. There may be probability that the adolscents with more than 7 meals per week still consume drugs. So relevant statistics should be provided by author to support it.

In contrast, there may be possibility that the assumption made by author that greater number of meals is inversely propotional to consumption of drugs, alcohol among adolescents. The moral ethics and saying grace before meals are good rituals that are still maintained by families.

In the conclusion, the author made so many false assumptions which are not interpreted properly. The data provided by author does not justify the validity of its conclusion. So to improve this flaws many assumptions have been give to support and improve this flaw.

Votes
Average: 5.8 (3 votes)
Essay Categories
Essays by the user:

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on Website Science News Today suggesting that more number of meals by adolescents...
^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: LETS_LET[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Let's'?
Suggestion: Let's
...text of passage mentioned by author. Lets take the first example of survey which ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 45, Rule ID: COMPRISES_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of
... take the first example of survey which comprises of more than 5000 adolscents. The author ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 226, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...als per week and usage of drugs, alcohol etc. The question which arise here is t...
^^
Line 5, column 232, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r week and usage of drugs, alcohol etc. The question which arise here is that ho...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, still, in contrast, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 332.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98493975904 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60062934141 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503012048193 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1887766198 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.9444444444 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4444444444 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209985940423 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0671905048687 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797597843925 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118033945989 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621340454477 0.0628817314937 99% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Sentence: The focus of introduction of the passage is appeared on Website Science News Today suggesting that more number of meals by adolescents has less number of illegal drugs such as alcohol, tobacco etc. In this arguement, there are many flaws which are not focused properly in this passage.
Error: etc. Suggestion: etch
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument

Sentence: Appropriate examples will be provided to improve the flaw in the arguement.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument

Sentence: Let's take the first example of survey which comprises of more than 5000 adolscents.
Error: adolscents Suggestion: adolescents

Sentence: The flaw in the assumption is that author has not mentioned complete data-set on the family-meals which does not reveal any further information.
Error: family-meals Suggestion: family meals
Error: data-set Suggestion: data set

Sentence: Additionally, he has given raw data that 30 percent of teens ate atleast seven meals per week with their families.
Error: atleast Suggestion: attest

Sentence: But, author has not mentioned any relation between the survey which meals per week and usage of drugs, alcohol etc. The question which arise here is that how we extract results from the above entioned data.
Error: entioned Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: etc. Suggestion: etch

Sentence: There may be probability that the adolscents with more than 7 meals per week still consume drugs.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: adolscents Suggestion: adolescents

Sentence: In contrast, there may be possibility that the assumption made by author that greater number of meals is inversely propotional to consumption of drugs, alcohol among adolescents.
Error: may Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: propotional Suggestion: proportional

---------------------

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 332 350
No. of Characters: 1612 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.269 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.855 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.52 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 108 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.497 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.581 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5