The following is a letter to the head of the tourism bureau on the island of Tria.
"Erosion of beach sand along the shores of Tria Island is a serious threat to our island and our tourist industry. In order to stop the erosion, we should charge people for using the beaches. Although this solution may annoy a few tourists in the short term, it will raise money for replenishing the sand. Replenishing the sand, as was done to protect buildings on the nearby island of Batia, will help protect buildings along our shores, thereby reducing these buildings' risk of additional damage from severe storms. And since beaches and buildings in the area will be preserved, Tria's tourist industry will improve over the long term."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the letter sent to the head of the tourism bureau, the author stated the problem of sand erosion and that it is a threat for the tourist industry. To solve such a problem, the author recommended charging the visitors of the beaches, and then use that money to replenish the sand. Although, the recommendation looks reasonable at the first glance, we can see that it relied on some evidences that are questionable in terms of plausibility.
first, the author didn't take the actual reason of the erosion into consideration. The reason behind such a problem may in many cases give valuable directions to the best solution. For example, the reason for erosion might be an act done by the tourists themselves, in such a case, replenishing the sand will not be a good option to solve the problem, as the main cause will be still existed. In other cases, when the direct cause of the problem can be gotten rid of by replenishing the sand, it will be a suitable solution.
Furthermore, the author didn't consider the economical abilities of the visitors, a study of their acceptance of such a charge and their ability to pay for such a service would make the argument more cogent. that is, if other islands are close to the island of tria and they offer the beaches free to the tourists, they may consider change their destination once they know about the charge.
Finally, the comparison made with batia island and that replenishing the sand there solved their problem, lacks investigations of the kind of problem the island of batia had, The author didn't mention that they were facing an isuue of sand erosion, and so, the same procedure of replenishing the sand will not by necessity help solving the problem of tria.
In conclusion, the incomplete evidences used by the sender of the letter and that they lack further investigation weaken the credibility of the argument and make the suggestion made less sound. More studies such as, the direct reason of the problem, the tourism economical abilities, and how close the case of island of batia is to the problem of tria island would make the argument more substantiated and sound.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1719 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.621 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.546 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.688 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: to solve; solve
...ing the sand will not by necessity help solving the problem of tria. In conclusio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1764.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 369.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.78048780488 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69574284242 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466124661247 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 705.55239521 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.6384954348 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.0 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.75 23.324526521 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.70786347227 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1957532012 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075161903537 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0772988155264 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117629882859 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426329812293 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.04 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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