The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces A study reports that in nearby East M

The argument stands on number of unstated assumptions to recommend a daily intake of beneficia to improve over all health. The recommendation finds basis on the study conducted in East Meria. Taken as a whole, the unstated assumptions render the argument highly suspect. Indeed, if the assumptions do not hold true the argument totally falls apart.
First of all, the authors of the news later relate a study in east Meria with better immunity to colds. The underlying assumption being that survey indicates a uniform consumption throughout the east Meria, high consumption correlates to better health, Beneficia consumption has no ill effects, and no other factors contribute towards the health of east Meria populace. To begin with the study very vaguely relates high consumption of beneficia to better health in people of East Meria this is very disputable as no specifics are provided regarding uniformity of the consumption. Hence, this assumption is clearly falsified. The study methodology is also not provided to test it for sample size taken, demographics and other factors included are sound or not making the study suspicious. The resulting conclusion that the high consumption relates to better health need not be true. A high consumption may also lead to accumulation of unwanted chemical compounds in the body of consumers. The low consumption might be helpful for health but otherwise this insidious accumulation may lead to serious problems later. The study also overlooks other factors that might be at play for the better health of east meria people such as regular exercise, healthy diet and a healthy lifestyle. Unless, the authors at West Meria Public Health Council are able to validate and verify above stated assumptions such recommendations should be avoided as they might prove deleterious for the populace of West meria.
Secondly, the authors relate the absenteeism at work and schools to colds only. This is a very narrow outlook on public health and an unfair assumption. Public health is affected not only by cold but by also a variety of other factors at play such as pollution in the area, cleanliness, mosquito bred diseases and health hygiene habits of the populace. To discount these factors would be very unprofessional of the West Meria Public Health Council. A thorough look at the patients treated in the West Meria hospitals is needed to determine the main diseases of concern that are prevalent in the area. Then identify the chief causes of those diseases and counter them in the required manner. Unless these possible concerns are addressed the authors assertion to hold cold as the key factor in absenteeism at work and schools stands null and invalid.
In conclusion, it can be said that the argument makes a number of unstated assumptions that seriously undermine its validity. Unless these assumptions are addressed the argument falls apart and the recommendation to increase daily intake of benficia to west Meria residents might prove deleterious.

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Average: 5.9 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 740, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ese possible concerns are addressed the authors assertion to hold cold as the key facto...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion, such as, first of all, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2519.0 2260.96107784 111% => OK
No of words: 484.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20454545455 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69041575982 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83713949757 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464876033058 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 779.4 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2566789366 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.52173913 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0434782609 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65217391304 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173793986523 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562316424583 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473138817771 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0946352480832 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507911054362 0.0628817314937 81% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 484 350
No. of Characters: 2474 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.69 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.112 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.778 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 187 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.043 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.67 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.298 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5