According to the memorandum author believes that replacing butter with margarine in Happy Pancake restaurants across the southeast United States and the Northeast United States will make Happy Pancake restaurant more profitable. The statement seems to be right initially by looking into the facts provided by the southwestern part of restaurants but, the author hasn’t provided complete data and also hasn’t considered the situations of other regions like the southeast United States for making the statement.
According to the first statement in the article, only 2 percent of customers complained about the replacement, but the author hasn’t mentioned the exact numbers like comparing the previous customer count and present customer count. There might be people who are not visiting the restaurant after knowing the news of replacement, due to this reason there might be a decrease in total customer count.
The author also mentions that several customers did not complain if they were not given butter, but given margarine instead. There may be changes he is adjusting with margarine at that time because he has already visited the place, there may be chances where he might never come back again. We also have a chance of losing valuable and frequent customers who only come for butter.
The author mentions about 2 other regions in the U.S to follow the same which will result in profits, but he hasn’t mentioned the profit numbers anywhere in the statement. There might be chances where other region people like butter more compared to margarine in which restaurants might incur losses.
Finally, without provided full data for Happy Pancake restaurants in the southwestern region and also without doing any research in the markets of the southeast United States and the Northeast United States we cannot conclude that replacing butter with margarine in the Happy Pancake House will not incur profits straight away and in some cases, we may also incur losses thorough research is needed for making a big change.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 330 350
No. of Characters: 1666 1500
No. of Different Words: 152 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.262 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.048 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.52 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.588 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.723 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.164 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 52, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...mentions about 2 other regions in the U.S to follow the same which will result in...
^
Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Finally, without provided full data for Happy Pancake restaurants in the southwe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, look, may, so, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1714.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 325.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27384615385 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54715713443 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473846153846 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.4534477453 57.8364921388 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 171.4 119.503703932 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5 23.324526521 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.310508337524 0.218282227539 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120776042219 0.0743258471296 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11318057687 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165080554157 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912114223825 0.0628817314937 145% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 14.3799401198 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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