The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books."We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base bec

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The following is a recommendation from the Board of Directors of Monarch Books.

"We recommend that Monarch Books open a café in its store. Monarch, having been in business at the same location for more than twenty years, has a large customer base because it is known for its wide selection of books on all subjects. Clearly, opening the café would attract more customers. Space could be made for the café by discontinuing the children's book section, which will probably become less popular given that the most recent national census indicated a significant decline in the percentage of the population under age ten. Opening a café will allow Monarch to attract more customers and better compete with Regal Books, which recently opened its own café."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The board of Director of Monach BOOKS makes recommendation to open cafe in its store by discounting the space allocated to children's booke section. They suggest this will helph develop the buissness and better compete with Regal Books who have recently opened a cafe in their store. There are couple of questions that need to be answered to reach to the conclusion on the recommentation made by the board.

The recommendation has been made after the competitor of Monarch books, i.e., Royal Books opened a cafe in their store, and recommendation suggest opening a cafe in their store itself will help to better compete. However, it is important to know whether opening of the cafe in Royal Books has increased their customer base, or not. If there has been no effect of opening of Cafe on customer base then the suggestion that oopening of cafe will add customer is fallacious. If the customer base of Royal Books has increased few other questions need to answered to draw conclusion that similar affectt will be observed at Monach Book, as the presence of nearby cafe near both bookstore, did Royal Book discouted any section to accomodate the cafe. It may happen that there was no cafe near the Royal Book and opening of a cafe drew people to Royal Bookstore, while a famous cafe is present nearby the location of Monach Book Store. In this secnario the effect will be very different, as people whose primary goal to have a great coffeee may not come to Monach Book Store. Besides, if Royal Book store did not discout any section to create space for cafe, then they added the customer base from cafe without loosing any from the customer base they had. While in the case of Monach Book store the board reccomeds to discout the space allocated to children's book section to accomodate cafe, which will result in loss of portion of existential customer base.

Secondly, the board argues that the children's section can be discounted, as according to census the percentage of population under ten has reduced. However, this argument alone does not surfice that space for the children's book can be reduced. Firstly, it is important to know how significant is the decline in the population percentage of chldren below 10. If the change is insignificant then the basis of the argument that children book's space can be reduced as the demand will lower in future does not stand, thus discounting space from this section will lead to fall in present customer base. Besides, the data quoted is in percentage, it is very likely that the population of children under age of ten has actually increased but in terms of percentage it has fallen due to increase in life expectancy. In this secanrio the assumption of decrease in demand of children's book in future does not stand, and discounting space will have adverse effect. Thus, it also important to learn before concluding what is the fraction of customer base is dependendent on children's book.

Besides, it is imprtant to learn if the people are really interested to visit bookstore to have a coffee. People may like to visit a dedicated cafe, rather than visiting bookstore with cafe. A presence of nearby famous cofe will desuade people from visitng bookstore for cafe. Thus, it is important to learn about the cafes nearby and peoples choice and opinion.

Besides, other question would be will discounting space from childre's book section will lead to enough space for cafe, and weather present customer base would like to have cafe which can be noisy inside the bookstore.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... increased their customer base, or not. If there has been no effect of opening of ...
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Line 17, column 39, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'discount'
Suggestion: discount
... Besides, other question would be will discounting space from childres book section will l...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, thus, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 100.0 55.5748502994 180% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2937.0 2260.96107784 130% => OK
No of words: 602.0 441.139720559 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87873754153 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55808614088 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 204.123752495 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.387043189369 0.468620217663 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 918.9 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.636397825 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.695652174 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1739130435 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212723422406 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731359120362 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611213280782 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117641727996 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685344660043 0.0628817314937 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 603 350
No. of Characters: 2870 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.955 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.76 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.536 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 143 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 94 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.217 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.012 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.547 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5