Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago, and within 3,000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands had become extinct. Yet humans cannot have been a factor in the species' extinctions, b

In this report, the author assumes that there must be other factors caused the large mammal species' extinctions instead of human beings who lived in Kaliko Islands, given the human beings there would not hunt for these mammals as food generally. This assumptions is problematic in that there are some loopholes in this report, we should evaluate them carefully.

To begin with, even if the human did not hunt these mammals for food, the conclusion that anthropogical behaivior did not cause the extinction is not well supported.

Firstly, people in the islands had lived with these animals for 3,000 years, the human activities can disturb the mammals in high possiblity, one of the most important invasion is that the habitats of mammals could be detroyed by the humans because they also need place to live and for activities. Secondly, the author tells us numerous sites where the bones of fish had been discarded werr found by archarologists who found no larger mammals' bones there. The author predicted the people did not eat these mammals. These animals , however, maybe eat the fish, likewise. Thus the competetion for food between the mammals and human in these Islands arised,given the certain source of fish, the mammals could also be endagered by people.Thirdly, there was a most serious while possible case in the islands of Kaliko that the mammals hunted human for food. This situation is the situation could happen in the islands while the author does not tell us. Of course, as primitive human in all other place, if thay are chased by large animals , they would run if they could not kill them, on the other hand, they would kill these animals if they could. This case would also make sense in the Kaliko islands. To me I suggests the author to find out what did the human wear in the island, maybe there will be more discoveries like hiebounds or skins of mammals.

In addtion, the conclusion that other fators like climate change to make the mammals' extinction is not supported. In that there is no obvious evidence the author shows to us to prove this assuption. What's more, there is a high possiblity that the extinction of large mammals is a complicated issue which could not interpreted by a single reason. In another word, for example, I believe there already had been large mammals in the Kaliko Islands before human beings' arrival,while there maybe climate change at times before before 7,000 years ago. The mammals were still there, thus this single reason could not make extinction. The author as well as the archaeologists should rethink about this matter comprehensively. In my opinion, there are some cases co-working which casued these mammals' gone forever. Like human hunting for safety and clothes,climate seriously change,and lack of food which collected by human.

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Average: 6.3 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: These
...nt for these mammals as food generally. This assumptions is problematic in that ther...
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Line 1, column 264, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[4]
Message: You should probably use: 'are'.
Suggestion: are
...als as food generally. This assumptions is problematic in that there are some loop...
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Line 5, column 529, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...did not eat these mammals. These animals , however, maybe eat the fish, likewise. ...
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Line 5, column 571, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... however, maybe eat the fish, likewise. Thus the competetion for food between the ma...
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Suggestion: , given
...ammals and human in these Islands arised,given the certain source of fish, the mammals...
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Line 5, column 735, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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...mmals could also be endagered by people.Thirdly, there was a most serious while possibl...
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...ace, if thay are chased by large animals , they would run if they could not kill t...
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Suggestion: suggest
...ke sense in the Kaliko islands. To me I suggests the author to find out what did the hum...
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Line 7, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'mammals'' or 'mammal's'?
Suggestion: mammals'; mammal's
... fators like climate change to make the mammals extinction is not supported. In that th...
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...or shows to us to prove this assuption. Whats more, there is a high possiblity that t...
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Line 7, column 459, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'beings'' or 'being's'?
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...mals in the Kaliko Islands before human beings arrival,while there maybe climate chang...
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Suggestion: , while
...liko Islands before human beings arrival,while there maybe climate change at times bef...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: before
...ile there maybe climate change at times before before 7,000 years ago. The mammals were still...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere maybe climate change at times before before 7,000 years ago. The mammals were...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , climate
...ike human hunting for safety and clothes,climate seriously change,and lack of food which...
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Suggestion: , and
...ety and clothes,climate seriously change,and lack of food which collected by human. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, for example, of course, as well as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 469.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98507462687 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65364457471 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57662185244 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46908315565 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 717.3 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2380516297 57.8364921388 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.9 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.45 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85 5.70786347227 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.270196640068 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0731793980432 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767014262455 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160483241749 0.128457276422 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0547585819641 0.0628817314937 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 474 350
No. of Characters: 2274 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.666 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.797 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.341 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 149 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.546 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.471 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5