Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago, and within 3,000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested that early humans generally relied on both fishing and hunting for food; since archaeologists have discovered numerous sites in the Kaliko Islands where the bones of fish were discarded, it is likely that the humans also hunted the mammals. Furthermore, researchers have uncovered simple tools, such as stone knives, that could be used for hunting. The only clear explanation is that humans caused the extinction of the various mammal species through excessive hunting.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The passage edify about a theory which implies that the humans where not the reason behind disappearance of the mammals. The passage take some facts to support the conclusion that the environmental phenomena wiped out majority of the big mammals from the kaliko island. however there are certain flaws in the passage.
Firstly, it states that 7000 years ago humans set their foots on the kaliko island and within 3000 years the population big mammals was decreased significantly. To counter this the passage states that there was no proof that humans were in direct contact with the mammals. however, it is possible that when thwe humans first arrived, they stated deforesting the island for agrarian purpose. therefore, due to significant decrease in the forest the population of the mammals might have been decreased. even if the evidence about the contact of humans and mammals are not found, it can not be said that the humans were not in the contact with the mammals. The evidence might not have been discovered yet. therefore, the surmise about the contact between human and mammals cannot support the conclusion.
Secondly, the archeologist did found the areas where bones of fish were discarded, but they did not found such areas of bones of mammals. however, even if such areas are not discovered, it can not be said surely that there are no such areas. Perhaps the archeologist have not succeeded in finding areas where bones of mammals where discarded. moreover, if the areas are not found then it is also possible that they exported the bones of large mammals to other places. they might have hunted the large mammals down for their bones rather than for food. therefore if the archeologists have not found the the discarded bones of mammals can not conclude that the humans were not the reason behind the extinction of the mammals.
moreover, it can be possible that the human group might have used to hunt the mammals to prove their capabilities. this situation might have prevailed the hunt of mammals and by the passing years the mammals might have extincted due to relentless hunting by the humans. The clan might have used their bones like skull to represent their strength to the rivals. such situation might have been reason behind the extinction of the mammals.
Additionally, The passage conclude that there might be environmental catastrophe behind the extinction of the mammals. but it fails to take into account that this catastrophe might also effect humans living on the island. there was no facts and reports presented to support that environmental calamity was the reason behind the extinction of the mammals.
therefore, the assumptions have many flaws and can not conclude that the humans are not the reason behind the extinction of the mammals of kaliko island.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 466 350
No. of Characters: 2285 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.646 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.903 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.442 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.364 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.009 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.497 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.794 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.266 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'takes'.
Suggestion: takes
...sappearance of the mammals. The passage take some facts to support the conclusion th...
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Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...the big mammals from the kaliko island. however there are certain flaws in the passage....
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Line 1, column 271, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: however,
...the big mammals from the kaliko island. however there are certain flaws in the passage....
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... are certain flaws in the passage. Firstly, it states that 7000 years ago h...
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Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...ere in direct contact with the mammals. however, it is possible that when thwe humans f...
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Line 5, column 407, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...esting the island for agrarian purpose. therefore, due to significant decrease in the for...
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Line 5, column 517, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
... the mammals might have been decreased. even if the evidence about the contact of hu...
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Line 5, column 719, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...nce might not have been discovered yet. therefore, the surmise about the contact between ...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...als cannot support the conclusion. Secondly, the archeologist did found the...
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Line 9, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...t found such areas of bones of mammals. however, even if such areas are not discovered,...
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Line 9, column 359, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...where bones of mammals where discarded. moreover, if the areas are not found then it is ...
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Line 9, column 484, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...bones of large mammals to other places. they might have hunted the large mammals dow...
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Line 9, column 568, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...n for their bones rather than for food. therefore if the archeologists have not found the...
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Line 9, column 568, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: therefore,
...n for their bones rather than for food. therefore if the archeologists have not found the...
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Line 9, column 614, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...ore if the archeologists have not found the the discarded bones of mammals can not conc...
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Line 9, column 614, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...ore if the archeologists have not found the the discarded bones of mammals can not conc...
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Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ind the extinction of the mammals. moreover, it can be possible that the hu...
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Line 13, column 16, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Moreover
...ion of the mammals. moreover, it can be possible that the human grou...
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Line 13, column 131, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: This
...he mammals to prove their capabilities. this situation might have prevailed the hunt...
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Line 13, column 377, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Such
...represent their strength to the rivals. such situation might have been reason behind...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ind the extinction of the mammals. Additionally, The passage conclude that ...
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Line 17, column 135, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...e behind the extinction of the mammals. but it fails to take into account that this...
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Line 17, column 202, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[7]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ccount that this catastrophe might also effect humans living on the island. there was ...
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Line 17, column 238, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...lso effect humans living on the island. there was no facts and reports presented to s...
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Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd the extinction of the mammals. therefore, the assumptions have many fla...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Therefore
...on of the mammals. therefore, the assumptions have many flaws and ca...
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Line 21, column 170, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nction of the mammals of kaliko island.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2353.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 466.0 441.139720559 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04935622318 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54272286964 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.358369098712 0.468620217663 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 715.5 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1143518886 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.0416666667 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.625 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269942864703 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866723079244 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0692013461933 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158746588775 0.128457276422 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0739282012729 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.32208582834 86% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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