An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The international development organization (IDO) has allegedly found a resolve to surmount the deficiency of vitamin A that the people of impoverished nation Tagus are facing. But the IDO has reached the solution based on some underlying assumptions and no factual data to corroborate their solution.
The IDO in response to the situation engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A based on an assumption that the deficiency is just because of an absence of it. There could be numerous other reasons that need to be covered before making this claim that this millet rich in vitamin A will solve the problem. One such reason could be a disease which might have led to a decrease in the absorption of vitamin A in the body from all the food. Although the reason IDO has suggested has a good probability to be true, IDO should cover all their grounds before being completely sure of this solution.
The IDO has chosen millets considering millet is the staple food of people in Tagus, and seeing it will cost the farmers more to buy these, it has also come up with a plan to resolve it by proposing to pay the farmers more subsidies to grow this new type of millet. The IDO but has overlooked any side effects that might result from consuming this millet.
Although IDO has their heart in the right place they need to bolster their claims with more substantiated data. Before asking the government to do everything to promote this millet, IDO requires to further enhance their research to confirm that deficiency is only or majorly because of an absence of vitamin A. Further IDO should cover any effect after the consumption of these new millets on both humans and the land where they are sown. All this data will automatically lead IDO to a solution that will be well supported by the government to solve the solution.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1484 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.623 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.597 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 43 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.518 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.364 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.097 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... result from consuming this millet. Although IDO has their heart in the right place ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, look, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1511.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70716510903 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62209452599 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498442367601 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5969605342 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.916666667 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.75 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08333333333 5.70786347227 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371441783468 0.218282227539 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137127986903 0.0743258471296 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107284691884 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224163924451 0.128457276422 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626798813157 0.0628817314937 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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