An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
The prompt displays information regarding a wanting of Viamin A amongst the indviduals in Tagus. The author suggests that the promotion of a millet that is high in Vitam A will combat the deficiency and solve the impoverishment issue. However, before this conclusion can be properly assessed, it is essential that the assumptions be meticulously analyzed, the implications be scrupulously addressed, and the answers to two questions be fully obtained.
Firstly, the author mentions that the expense of such a millet seeds is higher than that of other seeds and defends that this issue will be tackled by providing the farmers subsidies for their work. However, he fails to mention the amount of grants they will be issued or at least a mention of rather or not the subsidies will be at par with the farmer's expectations. It could be that the money they are provided might not match up to the cost they incur throughout their process of growing such a product. For a example, numerically, if the total product expenses round up to $100, but they only receive $10 by the government, they will be inclined to drop the offer. If this situation is valid, then the original supposition stated in the prompt is significantly attenuated.
Secondly, the author also assumes that the market will be highly ready to consume this new product just because the main item is a staple food in Targus. However, just because it is staple does not mean the people will readily adopt it as a new form of the item comes into play. For example, vehicles are an essential part of this world in today's generation. If a new brand of a vehicle comes out with a rear view camera, as pragmatic as it may sound, it cannot be fully assumed that it will sell well merely due to the fact that it has a safety feature and it is a vehicle, similar to how it cannot be assumed that the rear-view camera of the millet (Vitamin A) will burgeon the sales of this product and therefore combat impovershment. If this scenario holds merit, then the primary assumption portrayed by the author is drastically deteriorated.
Finally, considering all the above assumptions are legit and will follow through, are the people of Targus financially capable of purchasing such an item? To combat such an issue, there needs to be more of an enforcement than just advertisements and promotions. If such a product is advertised, do the people of the nation have such money to purchase the product? Perhaps Targus is a nation of penury and the impeccunious indivudals residing in this area cannot afford to buy salubrious food for consumption, thus having impoverishment be an issue in the first place. The author's conclusion is ambiguous and porous. For instance, it is not likely that there is a severe lack of Vitamin A substances in the country; it is evident that there is a lack of Vitamin A within the people of the country. So why are the people still impoverished? Why do they not purchase Vitamin A substances. It could be due to the lack of education, in which case there are other methods of combatting this issue. It could also be due to the economical onerous amongst the society. Thus, if such a situation is true, then the proposal of the author does not hold water.
In conclusion, the primary assumption of the challenger is severely blemished due to copious unjustified presumptions. If the author can provide adequate evidence, cogent reasoning to corroborate the claim, and ample remedies to the stated questions, then there is a possibility of further analysis and explication of the suggested proposal.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 614 350
No. of Characters: 2895 1500
No. of Different Words: 276 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.978 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.715 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.765 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 206 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 153 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 69 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.156 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.251 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.442 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.051 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 512, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... process of growing such a product. For a example, numerically, if the total prod...
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Line 13, column 573, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ent be an issue in the first place. The authors conclusion is ambiguous and porous. For...
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Line 13, column 687, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A substance' or simply 'substances'?
Suggestion: A substance; Substances
... that there is a severe lack of Vitamin A substances in the country; it is evident that ther...
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Line 13, column 873, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'A substance' or simply 'substances'?
Suggestion: A substance; Substances
...ished? Why do they not purchase Vitamin A substances. It could be due to the lack of educati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.6327345309 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 28.8173652695 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2972.0 2260.96107784 131% => OK
No of words: 614.0 441.139720559 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84039087948 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.977853291 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86895064112 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 204.123752495 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456026058632 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 934.2 705.55239521 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.5800590355 57.8364921388 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.307692308 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42307692308 5.70786347227 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293368039566 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714209715981 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514178426635 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142447901575 0.128457276422 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0738506179832 0.0628817314937 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 162.0 98.500998004 164% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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