Last year PrepUp had record enrollment in their test prep courses, but yearly profits fell
by nearly 30 percent. To the contrary, TopPreparation had comparable enrollment to the year before,
with profits rising by approximately 20 percent. This discrepancy most likely results from
the fact that PrepUp teaches only live, in-person classes, which require expensive rental spaces
and teaching equipment. Although TopPreparation’s total enrollment remained unchanged, its online
enrollment increased by 50 percent, and online classes have a much lower overhead. In order to
address these issues of profitability in the coming year, PrepUp will begin offering online test prep courses.
The author proposed that PU should begin online test prep courses because it is more profitable. The author also presents some logical fallacies to bolster the prompt. However, the argument contains some critical flaws and will not accept if the argument fails to draw an accurate conclusion. For acquiring an accurate conclusion some assumption will adopt which helps to draw an accurate conclusion and moreover, some incorrect assumption will be rejected.
Firstly, the author presents that PU test prep courses yearly profit fell by nearly 30 percent whereas the TP's profit increased 20 percent. But, the problem is the author does not clearly state the total profit of the two courses. Without a total amount, it is difficult to identify whose profit is more. For instances, if PU's monthly amount is 10,0000 dollar and next year fell by 30 percent then the total amount will be 70000 dollars. Whereas, TP's earns 50000 dollars and increased profit 20 percent which is 60000 dollar. Moreover, the author did not state the total enrollment in the two courses.
The second issue the PU teaches only live, in person which is more expensive because it needs rental spaces and teaching equipment. But, how about TP? They also need a teacher, teaching equipment and one important fact is high-speed internet which is more expensive. Moreover, the internet is not available in all places. So, the author states are undermined in this case.
The third problem is TP's total enrollment remains unchanged and online enrollment increased by 50 percent whereas the online classes have lower in price. The main flaw is then how the profit will increase. For example, if the total enrollment is 500, the online enrollment before the year 200 and increased by 50 percent means 400 and other enrollment is 100. But, the price of the online class is lower than how the profit will increase. Another, the overall statistical data is calculated in the previous year. But, we know thing changes with time and it may be not applicable for the present year.
To conclude, the overall hypothesis is quite interesting but is not acceptable if the critical assumption is not corrected.
Moreover, the prompt required some information to validate the conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1824 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.93 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.473 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.087 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.956 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.87 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.289 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.517 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.065 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...reased profit 20 percent which is 60000 dollar. Moreover, the author did not state the...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, then, third, whereas, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 28.8173652695 31% => OK
Preposition: 22.0 55.5748502994 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08378378378 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56301303012 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491891891892 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.6111836322 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.7826086957 119.503703932 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0869565217 23.324526521 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95652173913 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238709266513 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645241599827 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804278996846 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0884159535796 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117197227717 0.0628817314937 186% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.3550499002 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.197005988 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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