Most companies would agree that as the risk of physical injury occurring on the job increases, the wages paid to employees should also increase. Hence it makes financial sense for employers to make the workplace safer: they could thus reduce their payroll expenses and save money.
The argument claims that most companies would agree that as the risk of physical injury occurring on the job increases, the wages paid to employees should also increase. Here the author makes a conclusion that the above statement makes financial sense for employers to make the workplace safer and thus they could reduce their payroll expenses and in turn save money
First,the argument assumes that all the injuries occurring on the job is due to the less safe workplace. What if the injury was occurred due to the careless nature of employee inspite of all safe workplace. For example, the employee would have operated a machine while using his mobile phone and got hurt. Hence without proper evidence on the nature of occurrence of the injury, the author fails to provide a concrete evaluation.
Secondly, the author mentions that most companies would agree. However he does not mentioned the type of companies which had responded to the poll. The author fails to provide this information which is key to evaluate the argument. For instance, the manufacturing sector or the construction sector would probably agree the argument whereas the IT sector or consultancy sector would disagree with the conclusion. Had the author gave some insights to the above flaw, his line of reasoning could have been substantiated well.
Finally, the author simply assumes that companies can simply save money by making workplace safer. No evidence was stated against this line of reasoning. There could be an instance where making and maintaining the workplace safe involves more money than increase in wages for employees. Had the author evaluate those situation before arriving at the conclusion for all employers.
In conclusion, the author fails to provide evidence for his reasoning. The argument is flawed and unconvincing. The argument could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the above relevant factors which are essential to asses the given argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1629 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.123 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.586 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.848 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.722 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 6, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...expenses and in turn save money First,the argument assumes that all the injuries ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 307, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...le using his mobile phone and got hurt. Hence without proper evidence on the nature o...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 64, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ntions that most companies would agree. However he does not mentioned the type of compa...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 84, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'mention'
Suggestion: mention
...panies would agree. However he does not mentioned the type of companies which had respond...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 341, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
...uld probably agree the argument whereas the IT sector or consultancy sector would disa...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Finally, the author simply assumes that companies can simply save money by makin...
^^
Line 7, column 313, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this situation' or 'those situations'?
Suggestion: this situation; those situations
... for employees. Had the author evaluate those situation before arriving at the conclusion for a...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 10, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ument could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned all the ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1673.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 317.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27760252366 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6845407333 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.523659305994 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.667623603 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4117647059 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6470588235 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.11764705882 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374052860246 0.218282227539 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0993364219768 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138143471667 0.0701772020484 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232267952776 0.128457276422 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.267728303042 0.0628817314937 426% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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