In order to alleviate the serious unemployment problem in our town, we should encourage Autotech to build its automobile manufacturing plant in our area. The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for the plant. The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. I am asking City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer a significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based on are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answer to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument is based on several fallacious assumptions and fails to provide substantive evidences to support them. It unwarrantingly assumes that increasing tax incentives and organizing a campaign will attract Autotech, which in turn will alleviate the serious unemployment problem that the town currently faces. Without answering several important questions, however, all these assumptions cannot be proven.
First of all, the argument assumes as long it is able to arrange a large campaign and offer significant tax incentives, Autotech will be interested in it. But we need to ask, are people really interested in an unknown company just when another reliable company just abandoned them? Are all these unemployed people prosperous enough so they can manage the taxes without having any effect on their day to day life? Even when all of these are possible, will autotech really be inerested in them? All of these question hinges on the fact that the town is currently in serious unemployment problem and needs to get out of that before it can think of these otherwise grandiose alternatives.
Secondly, we have the information that Computech, a conputer software company abandoned its national facility last year. Several questions come to mind. Why did they leave? Was the area not suitable for their business? Maybe, they had trouble in their shipment of supplies from their other branches. The way to the town might have been laden with problems. Again, one might ask, why did they abandon all of these workers? Were they competent for the job or not? If it turned out that the people of the town are generally under average when it comes to their competency for Computech they might just be equally if not more unqualified for the jobs in Autotech. Thus a dispassionate survey accounting for the reason behind Computech's abandonment and the general competency of the town's people should be done to answer all these unanswered riddles.
Finally, the Hillview landfill is undeveloped for decades, meaning that Computech took no initiative to improve its condition. Also, Computech and Autotech, despite their uncanny similarity in names, are two very different companies as the latter deals with cars and is a giant manufacturer. We need to ask, will Autotech be interested in spreading their business to a place where several developments are needed to be made before it can burgeon. Again, Autotech might have its own tested and trusted bunch of employees and they might only recruit them by rigorous examination and only after rigorous training, they are employed. If it turned out that Autotech isn't interested in employing staff from the town, the argument's assumption that the town's unemployment problem will be solved as long as they can attract Autotech's attention will prove to be outright wrong.
Therefore, several questions about the current state of the town's developmentand, it's people's prosperity, interest and competences as well as the reason of Computech's leave and the employment criteria of Autotech needs to be answered before we can reach a definitive conclusion and until these questions are answered properly, the argument remains severely undermined because of the spurious reasonings presented.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
the arguments are not on the right track. Let's analyze the structure of the statement and argue accordingly:
condition 1:
The Hillview landfill, which has been undeveloped for decades, is a perfect site for the plant. //since it has been undeveloped for decades, it may have issues for a plant.
condition 2:
The building and staffing of this plant will put to work thousands of Hillview residents left unemployed after Computech computer software programming company abandoned its national facility last year. //people from a computer company may not likely be qualified or like to work at an automobile manufacturing plant
conclusion:
I am asking City Council to authorize a large campaign to attract the company and offer a significant tax incentives to make our town attractive to this giant of car manufacturing. // a significant tax incentives may not be enough to attract the company.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 517 350
No. of Characters: 2668 1500
No. of Different Words: 265 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.768 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.161 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.791 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 196 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 165 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.542 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.593 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.267 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.454 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.093 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 661, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e unqualified for the jobs in Autotech. Thus a dispassionate survey accounting for t...
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Line 7, column 662, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...mployed. If it turned out that Autotech isnt interested in employing staff from the ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 716, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'arguments'' or 'argument's'?
Suggestion: arguments'; argument's
...d in employing staff from the town, the arguments assumption that the towns unemployment ...
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Line 7, column 746, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
...town, the arguments assumption that the towns unemployment problem will be solved as ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2724.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 516.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27906976744 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83603885715 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 266.0 204.123752495 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515503875969 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 850.5 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.2379454069 57.8364921388 144% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.5 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08333333333 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163696894234 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515666988552 0.0743258471296 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476147787063 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.095207597214 0.128457276422 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319377661658 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 98.500998004 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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