"Over the past ten years, there has been a 20 percent decline in the size of the average audience at Classical Shakespeare Theatre productions. In spite of increased advertising, we are attracting fewer and fewer people to our shows, causing our profits to decrease significantly. We must take action to attract new audience members. The best way to do so is by instituting a 'Shakespeare in the Park' program this summer. Two years ago the nearby Avon Repertory Company started a 'Free Plays in the Park' program, and its profits have increased 10 percent since then. If we start a 'Shakespeare in the Park' program, we can predict that our profits will increase, too."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author of argument presented here has stated that in order to increase the profit made by classical shakespeare theatre production, they need to attract more people by implementing the program, which was proven successful for other company. The assertion and recommendation made by author fails to answer the question about the similarity of the “shakespeare in the Park” program with the “Free plays in the Park” program and unwarranted assumption made by author that in spite of increased advertising, profit have not increased for the company.
First of all, the recommendation is based on the assumption that “shakespeare in the Park” program will have the similar results as “Free plays in the Park”. is it possible that both the program despite the similarities may fail to produce desired results? it is certainly possible, considering that people who have lost interest in the shakespeare theatre production might not be attracted by the concept of the program. also, Avon Repertory company might have entirely different viewers as compared to The shakespeare theatre production. The author does assume that the program launched two years before will continue to have the similar results in future. may be the strategies used by the program in past might not be effectual in future.
Furthermore, the author has based the recommendation based on the assertion that despite that increase in advertisement, they were not able to lure more people to view their show, which has resulted in decreased profit for company significantly. The question that needs to be asked about the assertion is that on what basis the author has assumed that increased advertisement is linked to profitability of company. it may be possible that increased advertisement might have gained few more viewer, but the decrease in profitability of company is may be due to more budget in advertising and other possible losses. also, how much significantly the profit has been reduced. For all we know, significantly might mean 1% of previous year profit or 99% of previous year profit. it should be clearified by added that amount or percentage reduction in profit.
To sum up, the author’s recommendation to attract more people by implementing the said program might not hold true, as it is based on the assumption of similarity analogy about the program and unwarranted assumption about the advertisement
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1964 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.101 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.982 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 110 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.075 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.458 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.695 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 179, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
... as 'Free plays in the Park'. is it possible that both the program despi...
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Line 5, column 278, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...es may fail to produce desired results? it is certainly possible, considering that...
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Line 5, column 443, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ttracted by the concept of the program. also, Avon Repertory company might have enti...
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Line 5, column 669, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ll continue to have the similar results in future. may be the strategies used by the prog...
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Line 5, column 680, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: May
... to have the similar results in future. may be the strategies used by the program i...
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Line 5, column 753, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... program in past might not be effectual in future. Furthermore, the author has based...
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Line 9, column 416, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... is linked to profitability of company. it may be possible that increased advertis...
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Line 9, column 615, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
... advertising and other possible losses. also, how much significantly the profit has ...
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Line 9, column 774, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... profit or 99% of previous year profit. it should be clearified by added that amou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, first of all, in spite of, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2065.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36363636364 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19550831667 2.78398813304 115% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.425974025974 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 645.3 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.06074577 57.8364921388 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.666666667 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.6666666667 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0859072140721 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347119133768 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0320242307153 0.0701772020484 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0583004713403 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275126437236 0.0628817314937 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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