"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The passage comes to a conclusion that the prohibition of skateboarding in Central Plaza will bring about an increase in the number of shoppers. It supports this conclusion by stating that the business in the Plaza has been steadily decreasing with the increase in popularity of skateboarding. It then relates the growing number of vandalism and litter to the number of skateboard users, indirectly stating these users as the reason for the same.
However, one cannot connect the two events, the number of skateboard users and the increase in vandalism, together without adequate evidence to support the premise. The passage fails to do so. Besides, the litter and vandalism itself might be a standalone reason for the decrease in the number of shoppers irrespective of who was responsible for it, skateboarders or otherwise. If the previous sentence was true, the decrease in the shoppers might be the reason why the number of skateboarders in the Plaza increased in the first place, which is counterintuitive to what is stated in the passage. As a result, prohibiting skateboarding will not have any significant effect on the number of people who visit the Plaza for shopping. Moreover, if a proportion of skateboarders are also shoppers, this might lead to a further decrease in business of the store owners.
Hence, it must be determined which of the two, the increase in vandalism or the number of skateboarders, is responsible for the decrease in the number of shoppers. The contribution of the skateboarders, to the current business within the Plaza should also be evaluated to figure out the nature of impact the skateboarders have in the current business of the store owners. With respect to what was stated in the above paragraph, the current business scenario of the store owners may exists only due to the skateboarders in the area.
Therefore, before prohibiting skateboarding in Central Plaza, each of the various events under consideration (skateboarding, littering, vandalism and overall business) must be categorised into the cause and effect of the conclusion. Only then the result of the action that is suggested to be taken can be predicted accurately.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 353 350
No. of Characters: 1781 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.335 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.045 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.059 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 99 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.214 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.408 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.857 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.404 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, therefore, as a result, with respect to, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 353.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19263456091 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14292129091 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450424929178 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7864828799 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.928571429 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 5.70786347227 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335579056626 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120801162953 0.0743258471296 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717436174412 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210061563439 0.128457276422 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729626854521 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.