Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with

The business memorandum makes an attempt to argue for restoring air time for local news and weather, but lacks concrete evidence to justify such a proposed change.

First of all, are the complaints specifically about the lack of local news and weather coverage? It's not clearly stated that this is the case - for all we know, the complaints may be about the inaccuracy or bias of the station's coverage, or even about too much coverage of these topics. Without a clear indication, the complaints shouldn't factor into the decision for airtime distribution.

The manager goes on to mention that local businesses have cancelled their advertising contracts, but there is no confirmation that this decrease is caused by the decrease in local news coverage. The cancellations in advertising may be correlated with an economic downshift in local businesses, or a variety of other reasons that are not affected by the news station's activities. If that is the case, then spending more time on weather and local news would do nothing for advertising revenue.

Finally, the manager states the station wants to attract more viewers and avoid losing advertising money, but doesn't quantify how much advertising money they've lost or how many viewers they currently have versus how much they want to have. Is the station is a budgetary crisis and desperately needs to increase their numbers? We don't know why the program decided to spend more time on national news - perhaps that was in accordance to some agenda to increase awareness of what is going on in the rest of the country, and perhaps this mission is more important to the station than the temporary decreases in viewership and revenue. Without knowledge of the station's financial status or their broader goal, the conclusion reached by the manager is not adequately justified.

Votes
Average: 6.5 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 98, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...ack of local news and weather coverage? Its not clearly stated that this is the cas...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'stations'' or 'station's'?
Suggestion: stations'; station's
... be about the inaccuracy or bias of the stations coverage, or even about too much covera...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 331, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...hout a clear indication, the complaints shouldnt factor into the decision for airtime di...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 111, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...and avoid losing advertising money, but doesnt quantify how much advertising money the...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 154, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: they've
...snt quantify how much advertising money theyve lost or how many viewers they currently...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ely needs to increase their numbers? We dont know why the program decided to spend m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, may, so, then, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1530.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 300.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76561239204 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553333333333 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0313714434 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.090909091 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2727272727 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72727272727 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227204956742 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0904865893978 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0716203879649 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138504586329 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379090794959 0.0628817314937 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

argument 1 -- OK

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- not exactly. need to argue this:

Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 304 350
No. of Characters: 1497 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.176 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.924 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.704 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.979 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.636 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.378 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.637 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5