A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of f

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A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The argument predicts that the new Captain Seafood restaurant which specialises in seafood will be very profitable. To buttress his prediction, he lists several evidences, such as the increase consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City, no other rivals which only offer seafood and a nationwide study. Such an argument seems to be eloquent at first glance, but it reveals logical flaws on scrutiny. Therefore, it needs more concrete evidence to support the prediction.

Firstly, the argument cites the data from a recent sales study which indicates the consumption of seafood has experienced a 30 percent increase in the past five years. However, it is entirely possible that the figure of the seafood consumption five years ago is very small, thus a 30 percent increase will not make an difference to overall data. Thus, detailed figures about the seafood consumption five years ago should be presented so as to make the argument more cogent. Otherwise, I will not be convinced that seafood consumption is getting more and more popular, and thereby resulting in the popularity of Captain Seafood restaurant.

Secondly, the argument also presents the fact that there’s no rival whose focus is seafood. However, no rival doesn’t mean that it is easy to open a seafood restaurant and make a huge profit. Perhaps the reason why there’s no seafood restaurant operating in Bay City is that people don’t like to eat seafood in the restaurant, instead they are more likely to have home-cooking seafood. Thus, without detailed investigation about why no restaurant is currently open in Bay City, the operation of the new seafood restaurant is risky and may not earn the desired profits.

Finally, the argument points out a nationwide study to indicates that two-income families eat less home-cooked meals and concern more about healthful eating. However, whether such a nationwide study could represent the situation in Bay City is questionable. Maybe two-income families in the city still maintain the tradition to eat home-cooking food, as it is more healthy. Moreover, even if families in Bay City do follow the eating habits as explained in the nationwide study, the argument didn’t mention that eating in the restaurant is more healthy, which is a new pursuit of such families’ eating habits. Thus, the argument should offer more specific evidence that families in the city do eat more often in the restaurants in order to bolster the prediction.

Summing up, the argument is based on several precarious assumptions which certainly undermine the credibility of its prediction about the popularity of the newly opened seafood restaurant and its ability to earn huge profits. Thus, more evidences, such as detailed data about seafood consumption five years ago, a study about local eating habits, etc, should be presented to make it more cogent.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...hus a 30 percent increase will not make an difference to overall data. Thus, detai...
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Line 3, column 435, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...tion five years ago should be presented so as to make the argument more cogent. Otherwis...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'still', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'such as']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.256120527307 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.135593220339 0.15541462614 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0998116760829 0.0836205057962 119% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0790960451977 0.0520304965353 152% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0225988700565 0.0272364105082 83% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0960451977401 0.125424944231 77% => OK
Participles: 0.0244821092279 0.0416121511921 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8898525286 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0244821092279 0.026700313972 92% => OK
Particles: 0.00376647834275 0.001811407834 208% => OK
Determiners: 0.0998116760829 0.113004496875 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.015065913371 0.0255425247493 59% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015065913371 0.0127820249294 118% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2877.0 2731.13054187 105% => OK
No of words: 460.0 446.07635468 103% => OK
Chars per words: 6.25434782609 6.12365571057 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.57801047555 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.389130434783 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.341304347826 0.287650121315 119% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.241304347826 0.208842608468 116% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.15 0.135150697306 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8898525286 2.79052419416 104% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 207.018472906 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445652173913 0.469332199767 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 49.5145746792 52.1807786196 95% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 24.2105263158 23.2022227129 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6569373844 57.7814097925 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.421052632 141.986410481 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 23.2022227129 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.894736842105 0.724660767414 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 58.3409610984 51.9672348444 112% => OK
Elegance: 1.5873015873 1.8405768891 86% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.440835316436 0.441005458295 100% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.162560769415 0.135418324435 120% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0958749276855 0.0829849096947 116% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.605832001266 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113514931503 0.147661913831 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.184510938964 0.193483328276 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0942133974376 0.0970749176394 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.406142921315 0.42659136922 95% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0392425187417 0.0774707102158 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.284922612828 0.312017818177 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0696213463007 0.0698173142475 100% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 14.657635468 109% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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