A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In the statement the author came to a coclusion that the regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. This colclusion is reached by comparing the lesser tooth decay in the children of Nepal with children from the suburban areas of the United States. But this conclusion is based on some faulty reasoning and assumptions which needs further scrutiny.
Here the author said that the children of Himalayan mountain region have lower level of tooth decay comapring to the children in the US. This might occur from the food habit each region has. We know that many food has acidic reaction to the tooth, which harms the enamel layer of the tooth. It is possible that the children from the US are having more fast foods and chocolates, which are known to be bad for their acidity, thus require going to the dentist more frequently than the children in Nepal. This is also possible that going to the dentists actually helps them to prevent more rapid decay.
Also, like any other human organ, the tooth is also get affected by the environment. As the Himalayan mountain region is one of less polluted region, it is possible that the enviorment actually helps in reducing the tooth decay. On the other hand, it is possible that the environment in the suburban areas are casuing more decay of the tooth of the children. Also, the claim here is that the average of going the dentist is 1.25 times per year. It is possible that children from more polluted area went to doctor more than the children from areas which has similar qualities of environment like the Himalayan region. This does not readily dismiss the necessity of the regular dental care.
Furthermore, the author claimed here that the regular dental care is not helpful by saying the frequent going to the dentist. This higher frequency could have caused by more easy availability and the health conciousness of the people in the US. Again, we know that baby tooth regrows after they fall for the first time. It is possible that the baby tooth are most susceptible to decay but the adult tooth are not. By comaparing the decay of just the children tooth, one should not dismiss the necessity of regular dental care. It might be helping to keep the health of the adult tooth.
Although the reasoning of the authors sounds compelling, we cannot make a definite decison on whether the regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. there might be other factors in play, which could account for the decay and the regular dental care helps byt preventing them to become more severe.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 446 350
No. of Characters: 2078 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.596 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.659 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.281 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.238 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.406 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.476 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.525 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ood habit each region has. We know that many food has acidic reaction to the tooth, ...
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Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun food seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much food', 'a good deal of food'.
Suggestion: much food; a good deal of food
...ood habit each region has. We know that many food has acidic reaction to the tooth, which...
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Line 9, column 169, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... not helpful in preventing tooth decay. there might be other factors in play, which c...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, furthermore, so, thus, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 446.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7735426009 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32567419941 2.78398813304 84% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.419282511211 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 647.1 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 4.96107784431 282% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.3848767138 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.7727272727 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2727272727 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.09090909091 5.70786347227 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.28011573652 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908940701075 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107736477388 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.168900734544 0.128457276422 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884453679347 0.0628817314937 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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