A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising

In an article in a business magazine, the author states that business should hire employ who requires less than six-hours of sleep for higher profits. The author bolster his claim by the results of the recent survey, which shows that the advertising executives, who sleep less than six-hours per night, their company profit is high. The author hastily make a generalization based upon several unwarranted assumptions. The author needs to analyzed following assumptions for the better examination of the given argument.

First of all, the author needs to provide more information about the survey. Are 300 people sufficient for the study? It might be possible that there are large number of the people who are working in the advertising company, and only 300 people is not a representative sample size. Only people who sleep less per night are surveyed, as a result, the accurate results is not found. If the sample size is very low then the interpretation based upon that data is inaccurate.
Secondly, the author assumes that advertising company, who requires employ with less sleep per night is applicable to all the businesses. However, it might be possible that types of employ suitable in one types of business may not be suitable in other types of businesses. If this is true then the author argument is seriously weakened. So, the author must analyzed the types of business prior to make any recommendation.

Last but not least, another thing that the author needs to consider is, whether the requirement of the employ is only less sleep per night or others quality as well. It might be possible that the success of the business depends upon the others quality of the employ such as education level, their skill and abilities to understand the situation and to make a good judgment, trainings, etc. If this is true then the author argument is seriously undermined. For this resason, the author needs to provide details about basic qualities that the employ required for the better performance of the company and for higher profit.

In a nutshell, the author impetuously make a recommendations that all the business company must hire people whose sleep requirement per night is below six-hours. The author recommendation is seriously flawed due to it's reliance upon the several baseless assumptions. For the better examination of the given argument, the author needs to provide more pieces of the evidence (perhaps, based upon the systematic research study) so that the reliability of the given argument can be increased. Hence, it is part- and-parcel to provide others additional evidence, so that the truthfulness of the given argument can be increased.

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Average: 7.7 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rofit is high. The author hastily make a generalization based upon several unwarr...
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Line 1, column 420, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...d upon several unwarranted assumptions. The author needs to analyzed following assu...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ult, the accurate results is not found. If the sample size is very low then the in...
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Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... suitable in other types of businesses. If this is true then the author argument i...
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Suggestion:
... their skill and abilities to understand the situation and to make a good judgmen...
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Line 9, column 44, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a recommendation' or simply 'recommendations'?
Suggestion: a recommendation; recommendations
...a nutshell, the author impetuously make a recommendations that all the business company must hire...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, another thing, such as, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2237.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 437.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11899313501 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81925168637 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 702.0 705.55239521 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7570970564 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.523809524 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8095238095 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.71428571429 5.70786347227 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149681042392 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505517643425 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583567062864 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960347761308 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0405067517877 0.0628817314937 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 437 350
No. of Characters: 2176 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.572 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.979 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.724 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 111 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.85 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.779 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.55 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5