A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that the adults who spend 3

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A recent survey of 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed an association between the number of hours adults spend online each day and and self-reporting of symptoms commonly associated with depression. The survey found that the adults who spend 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to report that they frequently had trouble concentrating. Of adults who reported spending more than 30 hours per week online, 20 percent also reported that they had felt sad, down or blue, at least three times within the past month.
These results suggest that spending too much time online is linked to depression and people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online.

It is given that among 250 adults between the ages of 30 and 45 showed their symptoms associated with depression because of spending numbers of hours online. The given recommendation arise many questions which should be considered before any conclusion, which is made on the basis of the survey of only 250 adults.

Survey found that the adults who spending 30 hours or more online each week were twice as likely as others to say that they are suffering from less concentration. This point raise a question. How many adults among 250 adults have this problem? Second point is, with their work online, they may have other burdonesome work to do and it may be possible that with their such kind of work, combine with this online suffering result in their trouble in concentrating.

Third point is, 20 percent of what? There is no perfect number is given of the adults who spend more than 30 hours per week online, then we cannot say total how many adults have felt sad, down or blue. Besides,
during past month it might have scenario that they have less work load as compared to recent time. Their personal reasons can also affect them and due to all these factors they don't feel fresh.

The conclusion has the message that people who want to improve their well-being should strictly limit the time they spend online. It may be the case that adults who had been part of the survey do their job online. They don't go office or they don't have any job in corporate. They do their work online and because of that, they have to spend their most of their time online.

That is why, people who want to improve their well-being should prepare a perticular routine and should follow that regularly. They should manage their online spending hours in way that they don't get exhausted and they feel good even after spending 30 or more hours online. They should take break of 1 or 2 minutes and should also take healthy food in their diet in order to maintain their health and do their online work efficiently.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'well', 'kind of']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213541666667 0.25644967241 83% => OK
Verbs: 0.182291666667 0.15541462614 117% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0807291666667 0.0836205057962 97% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0338541666667 0.0520304965353 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0911458333333 0.0272364105082 335% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.109375 0.125424944231 87% => OK
Participles: 0.0390625 0.0416121511921 94% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.22216933388 2.79052419416 80% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0208333333333 0.026700313972 78% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0625 0.113004496875 55% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0338541666667 0.0255425247493 133% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0338541666667 0.0127820249294 265% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2003.0 2731.13054187 73% => OK
No of words: 356.0 446.07635468 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62640449438 6.12365571057 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.57801047555 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.275280898876 0.378187486979 73% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.162921348315 0.287650121315 57% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0926966292135 0.208842608468 44% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0561797752809 0.135150697306 42% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.22216933388 2.79052419416 80% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 207.018472906 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488764044944 0.469332199767 104% => OK
Word variations: 51.0946169597 52.1807786196 98% => OK
How many sentences: 17.0 20.039408867 85% => OK
Sentence length: 20.9411764706 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.476134155 57.7814097925 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.823529412 141.986410481 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9411764706 23.2022227129 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.529411764706 0.724660767414 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 37.233311302 51.9672348444 72% => OK
Elegance: 1.17796610169 1.8405768891 64% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.412635146922 0.441005458295 94% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.113206919755 0.135418324435 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0725793549035 0.0829849096947 87% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.559433840768 0.58762219726 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.201298205362 0.147661913831 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.160367798021 0.193483328276 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139232252856 0.0970749176394 143% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.239665317156 0.42659136922 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.137832459385 0.0774707102158 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.25378329739 0.312017818177 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.159044671009 0.0698173142475 228% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.33743842365 48% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 6.46551724138 46% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 14.657635468 68% => OK

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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