A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches.

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A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.

In this argument it states that in the coming years Mentia will suffer less headaches as Salicylates (which cures the headaches) are used as flavour additives, and it is based on the assumption that many companies put flavour additives to the product that is generally or largely consumed by the population.

There are many companies which manufactures product in which they add flavour additives to make the taste of that product better. But we cannot say that how much quantity of these additives are added as there is no information regarding this is given. Also, whether the population of that country are using/buying the products in which these flavours are added or not, in not provided in the argument. So, we can’t rely on this much of information and develop result basis on this that the residents of Mentia will suffer less headaches in the coming years.

For example, if there is flavour additive in a particular type of juice which is not liked by many people and on that basis if we say that people suffering from headaches will decrease will not be correct. As there are less people who are consuming this particular juice and hence people suffering will not decrease as much as it has been decreasing by having Salicylates directly. Also, the study states that people usually take something which is in medicine form rather than having it in food, whenever they are having a headache.

Though as provided in the argument that there are many foods items that are naturally rich in salicylates and many food processing companies add salicylates to foods as preservatives, so there will be decrease in headaches in the residents of Mentia. But that does not imply that there will be fewer headaches faced by the people when salicylates are also be used as flavour additives for foods, as many people do not buy products which have flavours added in them.

So, information regarding whether how many food items contains Salicylates should be provided so as to judge whether in coming years the people suffering from headaches will reduce or not. Also as to how much of Salicylates are in the flavour additives will provide us that whether the intake of Salicylates is enough or not to reduce the possibility of headache in a human or not.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 72, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun headaches is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... in the coming years Mentia will suffer less headaches as Salicylates which cures th...
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Line 2, column 527, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun headaches is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...hat the residents of Mentia will suffer less headaches in the coming years. For exa...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun people is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...rease will not be correct. As there are less people who are consuming this particula...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...t are naturally rich in salicylates and many food processing companies add salicylat...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun food seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much food', 'a good deal of food'.
Suggestion: much food; a good deal of food
...t are naturally rich in salicylates and many food processing companies add salicylates to...
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Line 5, column 95, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...contains Salicylates should be provided so as to judge whether in coming years the peopl...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ring from headaches will reduce or not. Also as to how much of Salicylates are in th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, regarding, so, as to, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1875.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 386.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85751295337 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65945103423 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.378238341969 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 612.9 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.2517965406 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.25 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.1666666667 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.58333333333 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141629903168 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0647870859955 0.0743258471296 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448526740622 0.0701772020484 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100667605097 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0369916569685 0.0628817314937 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.5 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 48.3550499002 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.5 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1838 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.749 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.487 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.41 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.683 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.209 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5