A recently issued twenty year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin a medicine used to treat headaches Al

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A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

Here, the author conclude that because of the use of salicylates in everyday life in one or another form by food products, health experts assume that it leads to fewer incidence of headache sufferer in future. The author also supports his or her assumption by providing some studies. However, before this recommendation can be evaluated, few questions must be answered.

Firstly, the writer contends that due to the therapeutic effect of salicylate, numbers of headache decreases. However,it is full of loopholes. What if there are other contributing factors which is responsible for lessen headache? What if there is another member of same chemical family which is responsible for this but scientist still not able to find it? So, one should know the exact phenomenon regarding this. Moreover, their is also possibility that people are more concern about their health today than the past? They may practice healthy habits such as, regular exercise, healthy food, yoga, etc. Owing to this good habits one can able to relieve their problems related to physical as well as mental problems. Therefor the author should not relied upon one aspect to conclude any point.

secondly, based on study of the correlation between the rise in consumption of salicylates and decrease in average of headache sufferes result, the author suggest that decline in headache cases is due to commercial use of salicylate. But here the author only assumes over study which is of very long time(twenty years). Now twenty years is very long time. the author does not explain about its authenticity. It is possible that during this time some of the people are left or decline to participated in it. It may be possible that study also include this individuals who left the study. So this is questioning the authenticity of the study on which the author's claim is depended. If this is the case then the argument above does not hold the water.

In conclusion the argument as it stands now, is considering flawed and to its reliance on several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer above questions and offer more reliable evidence, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 362.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0635359116 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71734618139 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560773480663 0.468620217663 120% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.3244472317 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.3181818182 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4545454545 23.324526521 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.40909090909 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169073920934 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0423917629675 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0563106007327 0.0701772020484 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0893781951043 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472533320623 0.0628817314937 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1774 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.887 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.634 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.302 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.463 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5