To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving th

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To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving there after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a musical format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format of radio that is increasingly popular in our area.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

The manager of WWAC radio station asseverates in the memorandum that the content of the WWAC ration station should gravitate towards the news and talk format in order to accommodate more listeners’ interests and to check the decline in listener numbers. Although the supposition made by the author seems ostensibly appealing, the soundness of the argument cannot be entirely established without provision of several specific pieces of evidence.

First and foremost, the manager claims that although the population growth has been observed in the listening area of WWAC, we do not know, yet, how much the newly added population would account for the total number of the entire population. Provided that the ratio of new residents to original settlers is small, then altering the content of the radio program might not be efficacious in bringing up the number of listeners since the new residents might not constitute a huge portion of the residents inhabiting the area. Knowing that there are new residents moving to the area is not informative until we know further the proportion of the total number.

Another aspect worth discussing is that the manager asserts that a decrease in local sales of recorded music insinuates that the residents in the area are growing less interested in music; however, such a claim warrants no foolproof validity since the causality and the correlation between the two phenomena are certainly mixed and obfuscated. No evidence is presented to uphold that it is indeed the lack of interest in music contributes to the decline in the sale of recorded music. Provided that such evidence were offered, then the author’s argument might be strengthened since we could indeed ascribe the wane in the sale of recorded music to the tepid interests in music shown by the residents. However, if the lack of interests in music can be attributed to other causes, such as the increased purchase price in recorded music or people beginning to listen to music digitally in lieu of purchasing recorded music, then, the believability of the argument might be compromised.

The largest leap in the argument that requires more evidence for justification is that the manager of the radio station observes that a new and talk format has been gaining currency in the area, and therefore WWAC should include such a format; however, concrete evidence is missing pertinent to who the audience is tuning in to listen to the news and talk program. Perhaps the majority of the listeners are original residents who are wont to such program format offered by other radio stations. If this is the case, then the original listeners are less bent on switching to WWAC. Perhaps another plausible scenario is that the new residents are not in favor of the new format, and since, according to the manager of WWAC, the radio station is attempting to make listeners of those new residents, this shift towards a new program format might not be relished by the new audience. Therefore, the manager of the WWAC radio station should supply more detailed evidence regarding who listens to the news and talk format so as to determine whether their potential audience group and the current listeners of the new program format match.

All told, although the manager of WWAC radio station illustrates the exigency of switching the program format to the increasingly popular kind, which is the news and talk format, so as to reverse the delicate in listener numbers, the validity of his supposition might be weakened, given that several important pieces of evidence to yoke his arguments are missing. Had the author been more specific in his argument pertinent to, the portion of the new residents that WWAC is targeting at among the entire population, the root cause of the reduced interest in recorded music in residents and the population that is currently tuning in to the popular news and talk format, that would have earned him some credence.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...who listens to the news and talk format so as to determine whether their potential audie...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ind, which is the news and talk format, so as to reverse the delicate in listener number...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, regarding, so, then, therefore, as to, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.6327345309 168% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 96.0 55.5748502994 173% => OK
Nominalization: 34.0 16.3942115768 207% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3301.0 2260.96107784 146% => OK
No of words: 653.0 441.139720559 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05513016845 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05508305356 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70425546407 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 204.123752495 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408882082695 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1054.8 705.55239521 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 22.8473053892 175% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.774762316 57.8364921388 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 206.3125 119.503703932 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.8125 23.324526521 175% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4375 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189678923826 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075640148329 0.0743258471296 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399472659113 0.0701772020484 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112505638061 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.012301287767 0.0628817314937 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.8 14.3799401198 159% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.88 48.3550499002 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.197005988 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 98.500998004 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 11.1389221557 162% => OK
text_standard: 23.0 11.9071856287 193% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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argument 1 -- suppose we know 'the proportion of the total number.', what is going to happen?

argument 2 -- OK

argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 653 350 //some arguments are wordy. like the argument 2.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 653 350
No. of Characters: 3228 1500
No. of Different Words: 248 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.055 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 240 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 200 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 140 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 80 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 40.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.393 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.403 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.646 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.215 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5