In this argument, author showed contradiction results about child rearing practice in Tertia Island and recommended further investigation based on interview-centered method to obtain actual result. At a first glance, it seems the argument might be well justified but a careful scrutiny reveals its logical flaws and ill-terminology.
First of all, to confirm about child-rearing practices, author compared two different observations which is not conducted at same time. With the passage of time, a society might be changed as well different culture or practices will be introduced. So, actual results never come out unless investigation will conducted at a same time. Similarly, investigation method is an important thing which sometimes may vary the final result. Here, Dr. Field followed observation-centered approach to reach his findings in opposite side DR. Karp used interview-centered method. Such kind of variation in research methodology never finds out actual scenario.
Secondly, to bolster Dr., Karp results, author provided evidence that children spent more time to talk about their biological parents rather than other adults in that village. This type of evidence never ensures that Dr. Field result was invalid. Normally children would like to talk about their parents. There is no clear evidence against child rearing practice.
Last of all, some anthropologists recommended that future research should be conducted to solve this issue via interview-centered method. Here, they actually show biasness about one approach. Perhaps, to obtain real scenario, another method should be followed as well different important factors which are ignored in this two given approaches must include like percentage of child-rearing children and its main reason, economical condition of their parents and entire village's people, population density in this area, outside scenario of the village etc.
Finally, the argument would be more comprehensive if author provides necessary information which is marked above. Weak comparisons make this argument poor. To bolster it further, author must conducted a fruitful survey which can make it clear.
Essay evaluation report
samples:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 320 350
No. of Characters: 1785 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.229 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.578 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.104 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 108 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.502 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.556 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.544 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.038 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 309, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'conduct'
Suggestion: conduct
...ever come out unless investigation will conducted at a same time. Similarly, investigatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, similarly, so, well, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1840.0 2260.96107784 81% => OK
No of words: 320.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.75 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13946029398 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6125 0.468620217663 131% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.22255489022 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 72.6417613 57.8364921388 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8421052632 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8421052632 23.324526521 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150690743018 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444050821423 0.0743258471296 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0511383188249 0.0701772020484 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744243675942 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420942085089 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.77 12.5979740519 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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