"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town — Adams Realty and Fitch Realty — Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty."
The author of the argument argues that if anyone wants to sell their home quickly as well as at a good price, then they should use Adams Realty. To support this view, the author mentioned that one year ago when he listed his home for sale in Adam Realty, it took only one month as compared to the Fitch Realty, who took four-month to sell his home 10 years ago. The argument also pointed out that Adams's revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch. To determine the validity of the argument, we must understand the real reason, why the revenue of Adams was twice the Filtch and why we should use Adams, not Fitch.
First, the author mentioned that Adams has 40 whereas Fitch has 25 real agents and the Fitch agents work part-time, but here number won't make any sense until we don't know the efficiency of the work. It might be possible that the Fitch workers, who are less in number and work part-time work more efficiently and their productivity is way better than the workers of Adams.
Secondly, the author talked about the revenues of both of them and says that Adams's revenue was twice the Fitch Revenue and on an average house sold by Adam is $24000 more than the average of Fitch. Again, the author failed to mention the profit of Adam and Fitch, because if the profit of Fitch is twice or trice of the Adams, then Fitch is more superior and better than to Adams. Furthermore, He didn't mention the number of homes sold by Fitch and Adams individually, because is dependents on the total number, for example, if Adam sold only 5 or 6 home of the same rate like $168,000 than the average will be $168,000 and if Fitch sold 100 homes and 10 or 15 of them are of $200,000 or more and others are less than 150,000$ or even less or high so, it will automatically decrease the average of the Fitch and increase the Adams Average even though the number homes sold by Fitch is more and even 10 or 15 of them are of $200,000, which is greater than Adams individual sale and average sales.
Last but not the least, in the argument, it was mentioned that Adams sell faster than Fitch and here author provided his own experience with both of them. There may be chances that the house author sold through the Fitch was situated far from the city or at any places which are abandoned and that's why Fitch took four months to sell it and the house sold by Adam was in the prose area of the city or at that place which is close to the all the basic amenities. So, this argument is based on the flawed assumption.
In sum, the author's assumption is based on unconfirmed and unsubstantiated assumptions. In order, to evaluate the merits of the argument, we need more data and information about the point mentioned in the argument. To make the argument stronger, the author needs to outline the real reason behind why one should choose Adam to sell his home, not the Fitch.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 534 350
No. of Characters: 2291 1500
No. of Different Words: 209 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.807 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.29 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.162 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.789 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.624 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.272 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... why we should use Adams, not Fitch. First, the author mentioned that Adams h...
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Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ere number wont make any sense until we dont know the efficiency of the work. It mig...
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Line 5, column 253, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: less
...ossible that the Fitch workers, who are less in number and work part-time work more efficientl...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ay better than the workers of Adams. Secondly, the author talked about the re...
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Line 9, column 398, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... better than to Adams. Furthermore, He didnt mention the number of homes sold by Fit...
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Line 9, column 717, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$000'.
Suggestion: $000
...00 or more and others are less than 150,000$ or even less or high so, it will automa...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s individual sale and average sales. Last but not the least, in the argument,...
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Line 13, column 294, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...r at any places which are abandoned and thats why Fitch took four months to sell it a...
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t is based on the flawed assumption. In sum, the authors assumption is based ...
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Line 17, column 13, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... flawed assumption. In sum, the authors assumption is based on unconfirmed and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, whereas, for example, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 11.1786427146 277% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2355.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.43502824859 5.12650576532 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22738555565 2.78398813304 80% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408662900188 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 718.2 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 22.8473053892 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 125.679734069 57.8364921388 217% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.0 119.503703932 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.4 23.324526521 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.06666666667 5.70786347227 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294662120125 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117465418403 0.0743258471296 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761873615761 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176743135796 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565018457024 0.0628817314937 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.87 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 12.5979740519 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 11.1389221557 144% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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