Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that the woven baskets which were in initially thought to be unique to Palean people were not uniquely Palean because the same baskets were also found in Lithos, an ancient village across Brim River from Palea. The argument contains some logical fallacies which can be corrected by providing some more information.They are :Whether there can be a case where boats were used but not been found and people can have been migrated or baskets cannot have exchanged from Palea to Lithos.
One of the assumption which the author makes is that as boats have not been found so the people might not have crosed the Brim river to travel from Palea to Lithos. For one, people should have used the boats to cross the Brim River but those boats are dismantled or burnt. This can expounded as people of Palea and Lithos who travelled freely from Palea to Lithos and viceversa should have got an internal dispute or some other issue due to which for security reasons the people of individual villages have dismantled the boats and blocked the transportation. So the baskets would have been exchanged from Palea to Lithos earlier before their dispute and from that we can say that woven baskets are unique to Palea and Lithos have got the baskets from Palea. For strengthing the argument the author neded to provide information that there can be no way that boats are burned.
Finally, the author overlooks that there might have been any migration before river has formed or before the river has been so deep that transportation is difficult. During this time the people of Palea already made baskets and so after migration of people from Palea to Lithos, the baskets were bought from Palea to Lithos.In order to strengthen the argument the author needs to mention that the migration has not occured before the river was formed or that the baskets were made when crossing the river has been difficult.
Conclusively, author overlooks some of the statements and assumes the argument is sound to prove his conclusion.However, there were some of the assumptions which author makes without providing any justification. Indeed the argument can be strenghtened by provdidng some information regarding whether there can be a case where boats were used but not been found and people cannot have been migrated or baskets cannot have exchanged from Palea to Lithos.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: One of the assumption which the author makes is that as boats have not been found so the people might not have crosed the Brim river to travel from Palea to Lithos.
Error: crosed Suggestion: closed
Sentence: This can expounded as people of Palea and Lithos who travelled freely from Palea to Lithos and viceversa should have got an internal dispute or some other issue due to which for security reasons the people of individual villages have dismantled the boats and blocked the transportation.
Error: travelled Suggestion: traveled
Error: dismantled Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: viceversa Suggestion: viewers
Sentence: For strengthing the argument the author neded to provide information that there can be no way that boats are burned.
Error: neded Suggestion: need
Error: strengthing Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: During this time the people of Palea already made baskets and so after migration of people from Palea to Lithos, the baskets were bought from Palea to Lithos.In order to strengthen the argument the author needs to mention that the migration has not occured before the river was formed or that the baskets were made when crossing the river has been difficult.
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Indeed the argument can be strenghtened by provdidng some information regarding whether there can be a case where boats were used but not been found and people cannot have been migrated or baskets cannot have exchanged from Palea to Lithos.
Error: provdidng Suggestion: proving
Error: strenghtened Suggestion: strengthened
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argument 1 -- not OK. better to say: maybe people in Lithos have boats.
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- ???
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 401 350
No. of Characters: 1937 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.475 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.83 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.339 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 51 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.455 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.086 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.504 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.681 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.214 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...cted by providing some more information.They are :Whether there can be a case where ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...askets were bought from Palea to Lithos.In order to strengthen the argument the a...
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Line 5, column 360, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thos.In order to strengthen the argument the author needs to mention that the mig...
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Line 7, column 32, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...cult. Conclusively, author overlooks some of the statements and assumes the argument is ...
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Line 7, column 113, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: However
...gument is sound to prove his conclusion.However, there were some of the assumptions whi...
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Line 7, column 133, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...rove his conclusion.However, there were some of the assumptions which author makes without ...
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Line 7, column 213, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...es without providing any justification. Indeed the argument can be strenghtened by pro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, look, regarding, so, then, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 28.8173652695 59% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94974874372 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53489572188 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.371859296482 0.468620217663 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 617.4 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.8473053892 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.662201155 57.8364921388 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 179.090909091 119.503703932 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.1818181818 23.324526521 155% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254035336473 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124938147926 0.0743258471296 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670564088154 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1880336066 0.128457276422 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0254124339927 0.0628817314937 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 14.3799401198 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.94 48.3550499002 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 98.500998004 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 11.1389221557 147% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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