Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archa

Essay topics:

Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.

Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.

Recently, some archaeologists argued that palean baskets were also made by people from

lithos, which is contrary to the former conclusion, which believed that such baskets were uniquely palean. And this argument was based on their new founding; proving the existence of palean baskets in lithos, given that there was no way for the immigration of palean to lithos. but the evidence they provided to prove no possibility of transforming the baskets to lithos was untenable.

Firstly, they claim the river between two villages is a barrier, but when this river occurred and how wide and deep it was at that time were still questionable. there is no doubt that the topography changes dramatically through the crustal movement as time goes on, so even though the river exists now and can only be crossed by boat, few facts have shown that such situations were the same at the ancient time. it is totally possible the river occurred recently and in the ancient times people in the palean could cross this area without any problem just by riding or walking, or that the river was there but very easy to cross by swimming.

Secondly, even though the river existed and people could only take boats to across it, their conclusion is still not receivable for me, since they sloppily asserted that

people could not take boats to lithos on the account of no boats have found now. maybe

at that time, boats were made by woods, but because of the fugitiveness of such material, all of them were eroded to dust and not recognizable now. Despite the boats, people in palean may have other methods to go to lithos, such as bridges and circuitous roads leading to lithos. maybe these tools that existed at that time disappeared because of the erosion by wind and rain.

Thirdly, the author assumed that only the palean residents themselves could introduce their basket to lithos, which lack the consideration of other means. it is possible that at that time merchants from other areas came here on the purpose of trade, and they bought their baskets and sold them in other villages including Lioths.

In summary, the conclusion needs more supporting information to be convincing. More local surveys on the immigration should be conducted to offer precise evidence that the immigration from palean to lithos in ancient times did not happen. also, the ancient photography should be analyzed to strengthen the evidence provided in this argument. More importantly, the people outside these two villages should take this into consideration. only by such thorough observation can they truly contradict the former option and convince people that the palean baskets were not only made by paleans.

Votes
Average: 5.5 (3 votes)
Essay Categories

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Lithos
...baskets were also made by people from lithos, which is contrary to the former conclu...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...or the immigration of palean to lithos. but the evidence they provided to prove no ...
^^^
Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...s at that time were still questionable. there is no doubt that the topography changes...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 413, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...ions were the same at the ancient time. it is totally possible the river occurred ...
^^
Line 7, column 643, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere but very easy to cross by swimming. Secondly, even though the river existed ...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...me, since they sloppily asserted that people could not take boats to lithos on the a...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 82, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...the account of no boats have found now. maybe at that time, boats were made by wood...
^^^^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: At
...unt of no boats have found now. maybe at that time, boats were made by woods, bu...
^^
Line 15, column 281, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Maybe
...and circuitous roads leading to lithos. maybe these tools that existed at that time d...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 156, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... lack the consideration of other means. it is possible that at that time merchants...
^^
Line 23, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...lithos in ancient times did not happen. also, the ancient photography should be anal...
^^^^
Line 23, column 436, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Only
...es should take this into consideration. only by such thorough observation can they t...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, thirdly, in summary, no doubt, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 448.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02678571429 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54601212377 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46875 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5575399995 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.470588235 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3529411765 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58823529412 5.70786347227 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162338430276 0.218282227539 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0554885697837 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520770465905 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0850515737882 0.128457276422 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308405107693 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 448 350
No. of Characters: 2178 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.601 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.862 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.475 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.398 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.782 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.141 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 8 5