2.First step of self-knowledge is rejection of familiar.

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2. First step of self-knowledge is rejection of familiar.

Above prompt asserts that the knowledge about self is originated by the rejection of the familiar. I mostly agree with this statement and presented few examples to express some negative and some positive opinion related to this assertion.

Self-awareness begins by the observation of one’s familiarity. People often take opinion of other to judge oneself. People ask family and friends number of question about themselves, while sometime they compare oneself with other to create a opinion about themselves. For example, a recent graduate student compares oneself with some famous and successful people and created negative opinion about themselves. Sometime he may compare himself with other unsuccessful people and create a false positive opinion about themselves. These opinion generated by comparing with other familiar people create a faux knowledge about himself. One can only get true knowledge about himself by studying his own past and present situations, other person’s unfamiliar life doesn’t matter. When person begins to look deep within himself then only they can develop a great self knowledge about themselves. One can take example of the great saints and sadhus, these people performed different deep meditation to acknowledge their familiar inner self. They taught us that information about oneself lie deep within us, it can be achieved only by giving full attention to the deeper self learning.

However, the think which are familiar often make a person complacent, he cannot grow unless he step out of the boundary of familiar environement. People who reject the comfort of familiarity and and adapt in the new unfamiliar surrounding. For example, mother Teresa decided to devote her entire life in serving the mankind by becoming a nun, which was not familiar during that period. But she adopted that unfamiliarity and devoted herself in serving. She learned the true meaning of her life by rejecting the familiarity and accepting unfamiliar trend. Likewise, Florence nightingale who is known as the lady with the lamp, accepted unfamiliar profession like nursing at that time to serve the sick people. She founded her identity as a nurse by accepting this unfamiliar profession. Hence, a person found his identity and knowledge by coming out of the familiar surrounding and embracing the unfamiliarity.

Moreover, greatest inventions and discoveries are done by the scientist are the outcome of the strong will to learn and explore new ideas. We can take example of newton law of motion, if newton believed that the apple fall was mainly nature’s law then the greatest newton’s law of gravitational force will not have discovered. His will and interest to learn new concepts and explore innovative discovery led to the rejection of old familiar concept. It is possible that if newton has not rejected the familiar concept and went with its flow, discovery of greatest invention would happen. Also, when a student leave the familiar surrounding of his birth country and move in unfamiliar ground, then only he learned his true inner power, strength and quality. This shows that until and unless a person leaves familiar ground, new self discoveries are difficult to comprehend.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ey compare oneself with other to create a opinion about themselves. For example, ...
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Line 3, column 533, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this opinion' or 'These opinions'?
Suggestion: This opinion; These opinions
...alse positive opinion about themselves. These opinion generated by comparing with other famil...
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Line 3, column 788, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...;s unfamiliar life doesn't matter. When person begins to look deep within himse...
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Line 3, column 1004, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ople performed different deep meditation to acknowledge their familiar inner self...
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Line 5, column 10, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...o the deeper self learning. However, the think which are familiar often make a person ...
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Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'steps'.
Suggestion: steps
...on complacent, he cannot grow unless he step out of the boundary of familiar environ...
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Line 5, column 192, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...e who reject the comfort of familiarity and and adapt in the new unfamiliar surrounding...
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Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: ', the greatest'.
Suggestion: , the greatest
...embracing the unfamiliarity. Moreover, greatest inventions and discoveries are done by ...
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Line 7, column 563, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the greatest'.
Suggestion: of the greatest
...ncept and went with its flow, discovery of greatest invention would happen. Also, when a st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, so, then, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 33.0505617978 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2726.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 508.0 442.535393258 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.36614173228 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8229938786 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501968503937 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 862.2 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.4313081836 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 104.846153846 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5384615385 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46153846154 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 10.2758426966 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241539183545 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0757935847541 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850029330728 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152486826689 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395527118111 0.0667264976115 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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