All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children s schools Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and sup

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All parents should be required to volunteer time to their children's schools.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

The prompt urges all the parents to give certain amount of time to their children's schools. For some obvious reasons I would like to be "mostly agree" with the concept and hereby obliged to provide elaboration of both the proponent and opponent views of the given statement in order to defense my position.

The proponent viewpoint of this concept is that all parents are the guardian of their respective childs. They have the authority to supervise their children adn the right to know about their daily activites in schools. In order to be properly aware of their situations the parents have to go to their (children) schools by themselves. It is pretty necessary for the children who are very ingenuous to the new environment of the school, specially. One of the prime reasons for this is that they do not posses sufficient discern-ability to choose what is right and what is wrong. As a result they might suffer in the long run becasue of their wrong choice of friends or any relevant things. For example - if a child is not properly supervised by its parents and as a result because its for-granted freedom it might choose wrong friends. Ironically, if its friend circle does not change in the future then there is a good chance that these very friends of its will drag it to the pitfall. The child might be addicted to drug, medicines, alcohol and other bad habits. All these might be stopped if his (the child) parents were vigilant enough to supervise him from his very early age, such as - going to his school to inquiry about his activity, to know the update of his results, his companions, his interests and so on. The result of a close parernting of a child, such as - volunteerily giving time to one's children school - does not stop only to circumscribe the children from the children from the bad habits or from making poor choices, it also helps the understanding between the children and the parents to grow. For example - when a parernt goes to his child's school, he becomes more updated about his child's interest from its teachers. He can consult with the teacher about taking proper care of the growth of his child and also what is necessary to maintain the interest of the infant to shine and to sharp. Providing and implementing these ideas a parent can take care of his child and its talent very closely. This close interaction will ultimately help the child not only undertand its parent but also to grow empathy adn respect for its parents. In similar way the progress of the child will be much steeper than earlier as its parents will know it more thoroughly and do what is best for it.

The opponent viewpoint of the statement can be somewhat - all parents might not be required to volunteer time to their children's schools as there are teacher to supervise them. The concept is partially correct in this idea that there are teacehrs in the schools. Yes, the teachers play a great role in shaping the character, knowledge and growth of a child as a child is in most circumstances are required to spend much of its time with its teacher. As a result it can be seemingly correct that the requirements of the parents to visit their child's school might not be a necessary one. However, this might not a authentic one. It can not be expected that a child will always remain in schools. In most cases a child has to spend much of whole infancy or adolescent in schools but not more than he spends in home. So, if the parents of that child is not properly aware of the choices, interests, mentallity and psyche of their child then the development of that child might not be properly happened. All the bookish knowledge and other stuff can not be learnt only among the fellow students of the child but much is to learnt outside the classroom too and that teaching is solely the responsiblity of the parents. However, if the parents are not aware of the situation of their child then they might not guide him properly and as a result acerbic relationship might result between the children and the parents. Apart from this - mental as well as phelegmatic growths are also pretty necessary for child which can not be flourished inside the school onl. Rather it needs collaboration of both the teachers and the parents also. This collaboration stands any chance only when the parents will prefer to volunteer time to theri children's schools.

So, looking at both the viewpoints stated above, it can be safely regarded that - in spite many alternatives and reasons, the importance of a close interaction among the teachers, children and parents is a must for a child to grow and that is why the parents should volunteer their time to their child's schools.

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Average: 5.8 (2 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 819, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...its for-granted freedom it might choose wrong friends. Ironically, if its friend circ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1398, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
..., such as - volunteerily giving time to ones children school - does not stop only to...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1711, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (childs) must be used with a third-person verb: 'interests'.
Suggestion: interests
...e becomes more updated about his childs interest from its teachers. He can consult with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 2229, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...child will be much steeper than earlier as its parents will know it more thoroughl...
^^
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'teachers'?
Suggestion: teachers
...to their childrens schools as there are teacher to supervise them. The concept is parti...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pend much of its time with its teacher. As a result it can be seemingly correct th...
^^
Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... necessary one. However, this might not a authentic one. It can not be expected t...
^
Line 5, column 1554, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ot be flourished inside the school onl. Rather it needs collaboration of both the teac...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1621, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...on of both the teachers and the parents also. This collaboration stands any chance o...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, well, apart from, as to, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 111.0 58.6224719101 189% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3855.0 2235.4752809 172% => OK
No of words: 821.0 442.535393258 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69549330085 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.35285882158 4.55969084622 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57949207935 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376370280146 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1159.2 704.065955056 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4204493736 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.46875 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.65625 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90625 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198181525535 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649326552688 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500476012485 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147408199991 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116634383976 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 819, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...its for-granted freedom it might choose wrong friends. Ironically, if its friend circ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1398, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
..., such as - volunteerily giving time to ones children school - does not stop only to...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1711, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (childs) must be used with a third-person verb: 'interests'.
Suggestion: interests
...e becomes more updated about his childs interest from its teachers. He can consult with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 2229, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...child will be much steeper than earlier as its parents will know it more thoroughl...
^^
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'teachers'?
Suggestion: teachers
...to their childrens schools as there are teacher to supervise them. The concept is parti...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 451, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pend much of its time with its teacher. As a result it can be seemingly correct th...
^^
Line 5, column 611, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... necessary one. However, this might not a authentic one. It can not be expected t...
^
Line 5, column 1554, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Rather,
...ot be flourished inside the school onl. Rather it needs collaboration of both the teac...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1621, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...on of both the teachers and the parents also. This collaboration stands any chance o...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, then, well, apart from, as to, for example, such as, as a result, as well as, in most cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 38.0 19.5258426966 195% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.4196629213 217% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 33.0505617978 239% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 111.0 58.6224719101 189% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3855.0 2235.4752809 172% => OK
No of words: 821.0 442.535393258 186% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.69549330085 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.35285882158 4.55969084622 117% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57949207935 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.376370280146 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1159.2 704.065955056 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 32.0 20.2370786517 158% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.4204493736 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.46875 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.65625 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.90625 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198181525535 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0649326552688 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500476012485 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.147408199991 0.150359130593 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0116634383976 0.0667264976115 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.