In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement

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In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

it is being stated that in any field of endeavour, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by achievements from the past within that field. however, the statement, in my opinion, is an over-generalization of the situation.

Admittedly, some of the important contributions are based on the knowledge gained from past achievements. As an example in the field of science, copernicus, one of the most eminent scientists throughout the history, argued against the previously established geocentric theory; subsequently, by adding on his own knowledge and doing comprehensive research, he developed heliocentric theory, which suggests that the earth is not the centre of the universe. another example could be the great contribution of galileo. he, an outstanding figure in the field of physics, rejected the two-hundred-year physics principle that established by Aristotle, and stated that the time when an object fell could be determine by the acceleration instead of the weight of the object. For copernicus and galileo, they developed their theory based on the previous work done by others and made contributions that revolutionized their own fields.

however, there are also significant contributions that produced without being influenced by previous works. For instance, madam curie, a great female scientist, devoted almost eight years to the refine radium. this refinement of this chemical element was unprecedented and her perseverance on her goal led her to become a laureate of the nobel prize. youyou tu, another great female role model in the field of physiology, had dedicated most of her life time to find the cure for malaria. During the whole experiment and investigation process, there were countless number of obstacles since no one thought such remedy exist. Nevertheless, youyou tu had closely worked with her team and no challenges ever stopped them; eventually, they succeed and youyou received the nobel prize in the field of physiology as a acknowledgement for her great work that saved millions of lives. both madam curie and youyou tu are two leading female contributor to the their fields, and both of their work are independent from the past achievement done by others; they made it possible to create something that benefit the development of human civilization without swayed by past contributions within the fields they are working in.

In sum, it will be too arbitrary to assert that all significant contributions is greatly influenced by previous work.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, so, for instance, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48866498741 5.05705443957 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20149448951 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544080604534 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 657.9 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.3399997426 60.3974514979 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.266666667 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4666666667 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236024461629 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841807889301 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11894799494 0.0758088955206 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185180147099 0.150359130593 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.137126459028 0.0667264976115 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 14.1392134831 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.8420337079 75% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.1743820225 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.0 11.8971910112 134% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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