In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement

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In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

This topic raises the controversial issue of whether past acheivments have an impact on a person’s current significant contripution or not. Indisputably, a person’s past learnings and achievements can influence some of his future behaviors, success and contributions. Nevertheless, many people who have conciderable contributions, experienced countless unsuccessful endeavors. Thus, I generally disagree with the opinion that not experiencing past achievments can hinder the possibility of great contribution.

First, throughout history, we have witnessed many of the known leaders, entrepenuers and contrubuting figures who have experienced multiple failures and had consecutive misfortunes. However, those people never gave up, because their ambition and will to make a change was greater than the immediate personal gratification. If their great contibution was due to their previous achievments, we would not have the chance to know them or be influnced by them.

Furthermore, perhaps previos achievements are important in shaping one’s path to future success and are has great affect on his/her motivition and strength in achieving wanted goals. However, it is not the only factor in determining a persons contribution. Other factors like the personal components, enviornmental incitors and gentics can have a great impact in ones significant contribution in any field.

In conclusion, past achievements and successes can strengthen the person’s self-confidence and boost future endeavors with optimism and creativity, yet, failure as well as other nature and nurture factors can eventually lead to better understanding of the convoluted reality and bring to more significant contributions and changes.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.5258426966 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 33.0505617978 45% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1491.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 246.0 442.535393258 56% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.06097560976 5.05705443957 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.96035189615 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.56414131475 2.79657885939 127% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.654471544715 0.4932671777 133% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.59117977528 119% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.212457276 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.545454545 118.986275619 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3636363636 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130672461717 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488044531836 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409060057412 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0793639001021 0.150359130593 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278031844532 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 14.1392134831 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 48.8420337079 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.1743820225 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 18.16 12.1639044944 149% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.5 8.38706741573 125% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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