To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
It would not be wrong to say that leaders and other public figures like movie stars and motivational speakers impact the common populace deeply. People watch them and try to follow their attributes and incorporate them in their daily lives. This admiration of people lay a huge responsibility on the shoulders of these officials to try and maintain the moral and ethical decorum so as to be admired and affect the people in order to lead them on the right path. So, in order to do so they must sustain the highest standards ethically and morally. One could reflect upon the examples of The Movie Stars and the Roman Emperor Caligula in order to understand this phenomenon.
Movie or TV actors have a huge fan base all around the world. It is the love and affection of peoples that they get praised and rise to the level of importance. And it is also these fans that try follow their footsteps and adopt habits, whether good or bad, in every walk of life. Be it emulating them in dialect, having the same hair style or wearing clothes that are alike. However, since they adore them so much they espouse their bad habits too like smoking, doing drugs, abusing and so on. Movie personalities should be aware of the fact that whatever they endorse is immediately followed by their fan bases. So, it is their duty to maintain a certain amount of dignity in their actions, both morally and ethically.
Another example of the leader is Emperor Caligula of Rome, who was renowned for his vice and debauchery. It is said that he was a sexual deviant and depravity was his other name. But he was an effective leader when it came to matters of state and the empire. However, people followed his lead and did all the things he used to do. The whole empire indulged in salacity and lechery because their leader endorsed it openly.
To conclude, I believe that public officials, no matter how they are, are anyway very effective and have a strong hold on people. So a leader must hold and preserve high moral and ethical standard so that the ordinary and lay people could follow their leads to get on the right track.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 333, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
... on the shoulders of these officials to try and maintain the moral and ethical decorum ...
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Line 1, column 380, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... maintain the moral and ethical decorum so as to be admired and affect the people in ord...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, however, if, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 14.8657303371 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1738.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 377.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6100795756 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36701696555 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535809018568 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.5325140792 60.3974514979 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.4736842105 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8421052632 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.15789473684 5.21951772744 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100096913815 0.243740707755 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0318712569922 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0331756363047 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0665952263251 0.150359130593 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272197460221 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 14.1392134831 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.46 12.1639044944 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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