The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

To develop young people for any kind of role whether it should be for any big industry, a high end officer in government sector or any other valuable field, the society should fill a sense of cooperation rather then making them competitive. I disagree with this pharse with some extent.

In any field competition is necessary. Competiton make a person competitive, it urges the feeling to score higher than his fellow member. For an example, If there is a college which doesn't take final exam, which just evaluate the students performance on the basis of their behaviour, then there won't be any competition. Student will avoid attending regular classes. They will think that their is no need to study as there won't be any exam to be worried of. Life will be chill. There won't be any academic growth of the students. Which will be directly proportional to the students future career.

In india students study very hard for JEE (Joint enterance exam) which give them admission in the top notch engineering college IIT (Indian institue of technolgy). Because of such high competition only hard working and deserving students get's admission. If there won't be any competition anyone would have got admission in such high ranking college. The reputation of such college will also decrease. MNC (Multinational companies) select IIT graduates as they know the potential of the students who worked so hard to get admission in such college. If there won't be any competition it would be difficult for the companies to hire good employees. which will also effect the economic growth of the country.

However, Due to high competition people forget about humanity. They just want to get good score even on ther verge of hurting other. They underestimate about cooperatiton. How much it is necessary in one's life. Cooperation is the key to humanity. Helping each other in bad and difficult times, cooperating with other fellow people is the path for a good life.

Based on the above mentioned examples and viewpoint. I strongly assert that society should teach young people about competition for getting into any big industry or being a high end officer in government sector or any other valuable field with coorperating with others people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, then, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 33.0505617978 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1861.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 371.0 442.535393258 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01617250674 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69757326214 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522911051213 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 585.9 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.0709083793 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.44 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.84 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.44 5.21951772744 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203874545528 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521152500703 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589636061451 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133414450557 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0515925711345 0.0667264976115 77% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 14.1392134831 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 48.8420337079 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 12.1743820225 72% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.24 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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