The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The future of a society largely depends on the development process its young generation goes through. The prompt suggests that the best way to prepare our young people is to incorporate the sense of togetherness and morality to work together instead of injecting a sense of competing against each other. Even though cooperation is largely needed for a peaceful society, importance of learning to be competitive, I believe, is far more important to overcome the obstacles and being able to get to the leadership positions.
From our childhood we are taught to compare ourselves and compete with others. In our schools, we are assessed based on our achieved scores. The student who gets better marks are called the better students, while the students with poor marks are looked down and treated as unacceptable. And this continues through our college life, to graduation and even after that, in job market. One needs to enrich his resume, prove himself better to get to a position where he can then get the chance to contribute to society. So without the knowledge of how to compete with others, one cannot simply find himself at the position to serve the society.
Secondly, when a leader is making decision, he needs to deal with numerous different opinions and not all of them are equally effective. He needs to choose and might need to go against a decision backed by majority, for greater good. A sense of competing with others, instill a sense of sound argument in the leader that enables him to prove his point without hurting other's feelings and skew the favors to his side. Without properly learning the art of competition a person cannot excel in showing this subtlety of winning arguments.
Leading from front is not easy-may it be a whole country or a small corporation or even an office room. It needs the collaboration of everyone working within the system. The person who knows how to work collaboratively, knows to get things done in a harmonious manner. A dissonance in any system leads to ultimate failure. So knowing how to work together is important. However, this important trait is only applicable for that person who has got to that top leading position by competing with others and proving that he is a better leader than anyone else in that system. For example, a captain of cricket team needs to perform better, consistently to first ensure a fixed position in the team and get the trust of the coach and selection committee. Once he establishes the fact that he is more capable and responsible than others, only than he gets the chance to lead the team from front, make decisions and inspire others to work as a team and win matches by playing collectively and selflessly for the team.
To conclude, sense of cooperation comes later, knowledge of defeating others to achieve the leading position comes first. So, the best way is to prepare our young generations for leadership is to train them for this highly competitive world with a sense of respect and collaboration.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'numerous'.
Suggestion: numerous
... making decision, he needs to deal with numerous different opinions and not all of them are equall...
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Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
... Leading from front is not easy-may it be a whole country or a small corporation ...
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Line 4, column 246, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a harmonious manner" with adverb for "harmonious"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...llaboratively, knows to get things done in a harmonious manner. A dissonance in any system leads to ul...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, for example

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 87.0 58.6224719101 148% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 512.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86328125 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72198083893 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50390625 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 781.2 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.5564053705 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.260869565 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2608695652 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86956521739 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225888087643 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564892158581 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0887116423621 0.0758088955206 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162507639893 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135288947103 0.0667264976115 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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