The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

Young people are the asset of a country. They are the future generation on which country's future development and growth is dependent. A pool of well-trained youth always contribute to make the country's backbone stronger.

Young people who can think of new ideas for development contributes to leadership in different sectors of a country such as government, industry, agriculture and other field. Sense of cooperation is very much needed for leaders. They should take all the people with them in the growth of a sector. It is impossible for one person to develop a sector single-handedly. A teamwork always contributes to a better growth. So, it is very much needed to train the youth right from the beginning as a team worker. A successful leader always prioritizes other over his own personal development and a proper chain of communication, cooperation leads to make a successful leader.

But only cooperation is not the key to success. Training to play well in a competitive situation is also very much expected from a leader. If a leader can't take decision in a stressed situation calmly, he can never succeed. That's why different competitive exams and screening process are made in every step of our life be it for admission in school or university or an exam for job. Competition is everywhere in a country and one who can manage and guide their team well in front of a hurdle will definitely win.

It can be concluded that only instilling a sense of cooperation is not enough for making a great leader. A combination of cooperative mind, proper skill, education and ability to manage a competitive situation is all needed to become a successful leader. So, if we want to see our country in the pinnacle of the world in future, we must prepare our youth force at its best right from the beginning.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 58, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'playing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'train' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: playing
...ion is not the key to success. Training to play well in a competitive situation is also...
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Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...uch expected from a leader. If a leader cant take decision in a stressed situation c...
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Line 5, column 225, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: That's
...situation calmly, he can never succeed. Thats why different competitive exams and scr...
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Line 7, column 319, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...ur country in the pinnacle of the world in future, we must prepare our youth force at its...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, well, as for, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 310.0 442.535393258 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85161290323 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98876843074 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522580645161 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 482.4 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0342306128 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.5555555556 118.986275619 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61111111111 5.21951772744 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152703304003 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0474542727161 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561192017994 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0883202731971 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.042116128168 0.0667264976115 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 100.480337079 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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