"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

The development of any society mostly depends on the competence of its young generation . So, it is our first and foremost duty to nurture our young genneration carefully . Any wrong process in case of nurturing them can briddle their growth, can be a great threat to our society . So, we should choose the best way to develop a young leader by instilling theam a sense of cooperation, not competition

To develop leadership, it is necessary to participate in many kind of group work .Because , It teaches us - how to communicate with other people, cause a group is made of many people of different characteristics. Moreover, in a group , we can share idea and learn to appreciate others decision . It helps us to lessen our ego problem and help to rise a quality of consider other's opinion .
But a sense of competiotion leads to a tendency to work secretly that others can not know what he is doing . A sense of competion can destroy our tendency to work together. when , we compete , we learn little . Cause , when we compete , we want to be the best and want ot be appreciated by others . This types of mentality destroy our sharing tendency and develop a hostile environment among mates.

Competition not only hinder the personal growth of anybody , it also makes the environment hostile for them which make the situation difficult for a leader . When, a leader is choosen , then other of the group want to show him digrace to other . So , they try to hinder the path of a leader rather help him which make the environment difficult . So , It hinders the development of industry, society , So , competitive nature hinders the growth of everybody in passive way .

Though competitive nature can hinder the growth , it sometimes stimulate to other to do better . Example, in a class , we work so hard to be first in the class , though the achievement in less comparing to work in cooperative environment.

In conclusion , It is important to show the right path to our young people to be our future leader for betterment of our society . We should make the environment cooperative to work which make the environment easier to them to make decision cause everybody will engage themselves to solve the problem .

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, so, still, then, in conclusion, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1817.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83244680851 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87511492006 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.452127659574 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 6.24550561798 272% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.3020559362 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.6315789474 118.986275619 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7894736842 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.73684210526 5.21951772744 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 42.0 7.80617977528 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150483094459 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473266351476 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0377655263193 0.0758088955206 50% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0778937739196 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0434075958587 0.0667264976115 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.