"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

Which one is better, a competitive leader or a cooperating leader? The author argues that in order to foster a good leader, a society should require younger generation a sense of cooperation than competition. I strongly agree with the statement, because of the increasing need of cooperative skills in government and industry, in particular, media industry.

First of all, not a single person can be better than a collaborative mind. Especially, for political leaders, who need to understand diverting perspectives of people and create a consensus upon a variety of issues, it is a must to have a sense of cooperation. Take presidents, for instance, they need to govern the whole country. They might be an expert of a few number of fields, but they could never have an excellence in all the fields that is needed to lead the country. To become a better leader and govern the country more efficiently, the presidents should know how to rely on the experts’ insight and how to effectively adapt them to their policies. Therefore, learning the way to collaborate is a necessity to young people who wants to be a leader.

Secondly, in order to become a business leader, being cooperative is a much more important value than being competitive. Communicative and cooperative leader is what makes a business successful, as it is impossible to yield a desirable result without cooperating. For example, in the movie industry, nothing is done in solitary. Not only directors and actors needed, but also a numerous numbers of staffs who deals with camera, lighting, sound, and every other thing that is needed for the production. Without knowing how to properly communicating with them and be harmonious with other people, a leader cannot be a true leader.

Nevertheless, there might be people arguing about the importance of the competition over cooperation when it comes to becoming a leader, saying people have to compete to get to the place of leading in front of others. However, they are missing my point. It is true that competition takes place in the process of becoming the leader, but here, I am discussing about becoming a ‘good’ leader who can lead people with confidence and kindness, which cannot be accomplished only with competitive soul.

In conclusion, a society should teach young people how to cooperate than compete with others to foster them as future leaders. Even though competition is might needed to get the place of leader, collaborative mind is the essence of a true leadership, which makes a leader a leader.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Which one is better, a competitive leade...
Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: MUST_HAVE_TO[1]
Message: After 'must', the verb is used without 'to'. Probably, you should use 'must' or 'have to' here.
Suggestion: must; have to
...ensus upon a variety of issues, it is a must to have a sense of cooperation. Take presi...
Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...e country. They might be an expert of a few number of fields, but they could never have an...
Line 7, column 376, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ut here, I am discussing about becoming a 'good' leader who can lead pe...
Line 9, column 162, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have needed' or 'need'?
Suggestion: have needed; need
...aders. Even though competition is might needed to get the place of leader, collaborati...
Line 9, column 265, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'a leader'.
Suggestion: a leader
...sence of a true leadership, which makes a leader a leader.

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, first of all, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 58.6224719101 104% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2139.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06872037915 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05901042073 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492890995261 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7907123577 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.578947368 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15789473684 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155699785729 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0525643904772 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369583193709 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0963840488745 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179257506495 0.0667264976115 27% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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