The best way for society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is a stated fact that younger generations are expected to take the country forward and are expected to bring beneficial advancements to the world. Minds of young people are a subject to plasticity, they can be moulded in whatever way they are taught in their inchoate state. For improvement of the leadership aspect of the society, It seems quintessential to motivate the younger generation and instill them with some leadership qualities and a great sense of cooperation to for a beatified and halcyon future.
Is the quality of competitiveness right or wrong? It has been a matter of debate throughout the eons of the human socity. People in today's world often tend to lose their sense of judging what's right or wrong when they get too involved in the concept of competition. Though competitiveness is an important aspect when it comes to advancements in one's career or life, but people who get too convulated in it, makes people lose their morals and they become devious, which directly harms the sense of cooperation as it creates a begrudging feeling among the peers and within the working environment.
Let us take into consideration, an example of Pakistan's Democracy, which was fully focused towards working for the advancement of the country until the time when their was a conflict of interest between the country's government and the military, which created a conflagatory send of competitveness and the country's economy had to see a new low as there was no sense of cooperation between Pakistan's government and the military.
Moreover, Cooperation leads to blissful environment and if we prepare the younger generations of a country to lead their life in the right manner, It will be lucrative for all the citizens as well as the economy of the country. Unity and cohesiveness, which are one of the most important factors for a happy life, will be justified. It will make the people think within their right minds and make the best decisions for the betterment of the society. Thus, It can be concluded that the best way for the future of the society is to teach it's youth's rudiment minds the right sense of coorperation instead of competition.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 33.0505617978 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1807.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 365.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95068493151 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95019519982 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498630136986 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 104.890683836 60.3974514979 174% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.583333333 118.986275619 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4166666667 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233997530041 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0805103049885 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061677534669 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134557965843 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435684417366 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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