The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The youth of a society is its future. The young generation helps shape the future of a society and it is the responsibility of elders and more mature people to help instill in them the good qualities required to build a better tomorrow. In light of this thought I agree that instilling a sense of coöperation, is very much important, in young minds is very essential. I am also think that competition as such should not be ignored but a healthy competition should be promoted.
When a society is more cooperative, the voices of everyone is heard and not of just the majority. It provides a sense of equality. Take for example, a government. When a government wants to pass a law it has the pass through both the Lok Sabha and the Rajya Sabha. For this to happen the government requires that all the ministers cooperate to pass the law for the betterment of the nation. The sense of agreeing to something that would help better the current state of the nation should be developed by the ministers. Here we are talking about instilling the notion of cooperation in young children. Take the example of a class drama which is to be organised by students. For the success of the play all the actors must cooperate and work together and not think of outshining each other. If they start competing among themselves, then they are the ones that will suffer and not be able to deliver the best play. Say, the acting department wants to outshine the music department then the audience might think that the music of the play is not that great which would be a disadvantage resulting in a not so good performance had the different departments put aside their differences.
Mahatma Gandhi lead a Non-Cooperation movement against the Britishers when they were ruling India. He launched a Non-Cooperation movement because he realised that for a society to function effectively, cooperation among its citizen is very necessary. In this movement people refused to pay takes that were humongous and were revolting against it in a peaceful manner. By looking at these examples we can clearly see how important cooperation is to a society.
Though cooperation is very much essential we can not say that competition will only lead to negativity and instability. Competition definitely makes us do better than others and give our best. In the same example of a school play, only the fact that a team needs to win motivates it to perform better. A team wants to do better than other teams so they will surely put in extra efforts to show their play is the best one to win. This promotes a healthy competition. A healthy completion is always beneficial. With this competition people always keep trying to better themselves and do good things so that their work is recognised.
A society needs cooperate as well as take criticism in its stride and criticism is achieved through competition. A healthy competition where nobody is hurt and everybody participates and pitches in idea for the betterment is definitely something any growing person should possess. Younger people should be taught about how important it is to cooperate with each other but at the same time healthy competition would never hurt.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, then, well, for example, talking about, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 547.0 442.535393258 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84460694698 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85683727322 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464351005484 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.6891885402 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.3793103448 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8620689655 23.4991977007 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8275862069 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17082106672 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0472486179158 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397477361785 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0936490873901 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436542974899 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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