The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

The competition always was the main thing of the progress. Historically, there was a society, which had the same ideas. However, after a while, the new ideas arise in the human minds. As a result, it leads to the creation of companies either fabrics. Which leads, to the creation of the competition. Competition makes progress. Even, in the last 20 years, the MacBook’s and Iphones became themselves, only because of the Steve Jobs and Bill Gates competition.

Nevertheless, the competition can be valuable, only in good manner. I mean, that creation of the new ideas which leads to the progress that is the real competition. While, ideas stilling is absolutely unacceptable. In the same time, regarding the contribution it teaches to be patient and friendly person, as well as to be team oriented. However, as it used to be and as it exists, if you want to get a high result, you need to be hungry, you need to be angry in the good sense of the word. For example, the people can’t always be in zone of the comfort. They must get out from the frames.

Furthermore, leadership position always lead to the conflicts and it would be much better if the children from the childhood, will learn how to communicate in different situation.

Finally, I would like to give an advice and underline negative and positive sides of what could happen, in both, growth up without competition, and without cooperation. First of all, restriction of the competition might lead, to the loss of the aims. What makes us live, what gives us hope, that is the aim. The aim to be best of the best. The aim to create new music or to be the best actor, or even find a way to overcome cancer.

Therefore, competition from the childhood give us necessary knowledges to become professional. On the other hand, the cooperation give us power and knowledge to exist in social society. Even, without making new friends, we always learn how to communicate with different persons.

Therefore, as I think, you always have to have the balance between cooperation and competition. Yin and yang, makes our life to flow in the right way.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
Suggestion: was always
The competition always was the main thing of the progress. Histori...
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Line 1, column 631, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... progress that is the real competition. While, ideas stilling is absolutely unaccepta...
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Line 1, column 992, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
Suggestion: be always
...ord. For example, the people can't always be in zone of the comfort. They must get o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, i mean, i think, as a result, as well as, first of all, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1736.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74316939891 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85910391571 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516393442623 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 537.3 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 4.96107784431 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 22.8473053892 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.3384878249 57.8364921388 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.44 119.503703932 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 14.64 23.324526521 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 5.15768463074 19% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944054620463 0.218282227539 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254161174867 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0345532770541 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0944054620463 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0628817314937 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 14.3799401198 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 48.3550499002 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 12.197005988 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.62 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 12.3882235529 44% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.1389221557 68% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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