The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
There is a general consensus in the world that the young generation needs to be groomed as the leaders of the future and this holds true for any sector be it governance or industry. However, there has always been a debate on what constitutes the best way to train the leaders of tomorrow: a dilemma between two contrasting school of thoughts - to train the youths as fierce competitors or to nurture team players. In my opinion, the society and the nations should prioritize instilling the values of cooperation rather than the sense of unhealthy competition in the youths through formal education as well as other forms of training.
The modern human society is characterized as one that is beset by problems and issues far more complex than that faced by the societies in the history, partly because rapidly changing human factors such as war and conflict are increasingly becoming the matters of concern in the cyber age in addition to the pre-existing natural phenomena like disease and natural disasters that have always plagued human civilization. Modern problems of increasing complexity require modern solutions and a progressive outlook from the human society if we are to overcome all the hallenges on the journey to sustainability and a secure future. While competition has always been classically regarded as a natural predicament and also an obvious precursor to growth and development of the society where individuals and groups of individuals compete with one another and in the course grow fitter in line with the Darwinian theory of "Struggle for Existence" and "Survival of the Fittest". While such thought schools have enabled development to some extent, in human history, the competitive instinct often got the best of the human society resulting in pernicious consequences for the parties at competition. All wars were manifestations of the competitive instincts of the human society be it competition for political power or for dominance or in the name of religion and principles. While the wars like the Cold War are often attributed to positive developments like the concurrent advancement of arms an ammunition as well as space technology, the race of nations to be world powers had the devastating consequence of setting behind the development in other fields of global human importance such as disease control or poverty alleviation.
Cooperative problem solving is the way forward for humanity in all scales - individual, community, nation and region. The modern institutions, academic, scientific or financial all value "team-players" who are capable of working togehter in a team of individuals with different expertise towards a common goal. For instance, pollution control, a burning cosmopolitan issue, requires experts from fields as diverse and apparently disparate as physics, chemistry, public health, engineering and policy to come together in a truly interdisciplinary manner for the most efficacious solutions. Cooperative teams spend time and resources optimally to make the best out of collective skills and capabilities while minimizing conflicts in the team which are clearly counter-productive but simply unavoidable when the team members are overcome by competitive instincts.
While competition may be seen as improving individual competencies, the best output of a group effort comes only out of cooperative problem solving. Youths who are trained to work collectively, who become the leaders who can view the problem in question bigger than themselves or the competition with their peers are the true harbingers of a future that is grounded in universalism in its essence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'consensus'.
Suggestion: consensus
There is a general consensus in the world that the young generation ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, however, if, look, may, so, still, well, while, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3097.0 2235.4752809 139% => OK
No of words: 568.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45246478873 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.30257694324 2.79657885939 118% => OK
Unique words: 303.0 215.323595506 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533450704225 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 988.2 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 6.24550561798 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 23.0359550562 161% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.4880667484 60.3974514979 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 206.466666667 118.986275619 174% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.8666666667 23.4991977007 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.8 5.21951772744 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171619600129 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0597638369633 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0421997082856 0.0758088955206 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962862116432 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403935432914 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.2 14.1392134831 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.46 48.8420337079 52% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.9 12.1743820225 155% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.31 8.38706741573 123% => OK
difficult_words: 174.0 100.480337079 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.2143820225 150% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.7820224719 161% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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