"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

Essay topics:

"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

According to me, the best development any society or nation can achieve by the sense of cooperation within. May it be a government or any other field, the most essential quality any organization should have is the sense of cooperation.

The young people of any nation are the deciding factor for development of any country and they should have the quality of cooperation. Cooperation is the quality which comes by practice. Cooperation means working together, helping others, lifting other and by vertue of that ultimately growing faster and together. One example if i site about cooperation is merger of two companies. Individually it might be not progressing significantly but after cooperation with other companies it can grow like never before. One of the example is meger of Cairn oil and gas with Vedanta resources. Now Cairn oil and gas has become india's largest oil production company and about to produce 60% of india's crude oil. If there were no cooperation with vedanta, cairn alone would never be able to excel this much.

Government of any country has a crucial role in development of nation. Young leaders are joining politics and if they have sense of cooperation then rather than fighting ot castigating oponents, they can work together for betterment of nation. Even in industries, young talets should be prepared in such way that they cooperate with managers or experienced people so that new ideas can match up with experience and idustry can develope.

So it can be concluded that sense of cooperation in young people is benificial and by that any industry or the government of nation can excel.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
According to me, the best development any society or na...
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Line 5, column 331, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...ing faster and together. One example if i site about cooperation is merger of two...
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Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'indias the largest'.
Suggestion: indias the largest
...urces. Now Cairn oil and gas has become indias largest oil production company and about to pro...
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Line 9, column 149, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d if they have sense of cooperation then rather than fighting ot castigating opon...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1362.0 2235.4752809 61% => OK
No of words: 269.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06319702602 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84872389257 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 215.323595506 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531598513011 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.2909087475 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2857142857 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2142857143 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.57142857143 5.21951772744 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.12892183352 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454375254637 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0476267335204 0.0758088955206 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935927482139 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280186000854 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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